Thanks for your comments. I'm impressed that you were still awake enough to find typos on page 183 :-), and if they can all be handled by the RFC Editor, that's better for me. (I expect others to "abuse" the Queen's English, but it's a personal pain if I have to do so myself :-).
Keith. > I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) > reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see > http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-imss-fc-fcsp-mib-02.txt > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review Date: 2008-06-19 > IETF LC End Date: 2008-06-19 > IESG Telechat date: unknown > > Summary: Ready > > Comments: I've found only a low number of editorial (i.e., to be handled > by the RFC Editor) problems (spelling errors, typos, raw abbrevs, ...): > (I've put a '?' after suggestions/questionable items, MIB names are for > their descriptions) > > - ToC page 2: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments > (i.e., US spelling, same in 7 page 232) > > - 1 page 3: IETF's -> IETF? (same in t11FcTcMIB page 27, > t11FcSpAuthenticationMIB page 43, t11FcSpZoningMIB page 64, > t11FcSpPolicyMIB page 77, t11FcSpSaMIB page 176, 7 page 232) > > - 3.2 page 11: HBAs -> Host Bus Adapters > (usually abbrevs, including this one, should be introduced by it is > the only use) > > - 3.4.7 page 17: introduce abbrevs: SSB (Server Session Begin), SSE > (Server Session End), SW_ILS (Switch Fabric Internal Link Services); > or extend them when they are used once in the introduction part: > EACA -> Enhanced Acquire Change Authorization Request, ERCA -> > Enhanced Release Change Authorization, SFC -> Stage Fabric Configuration > > - 4.9 page 25: the the -> the (and in t11FcSpAuRejDirection page 58, > don't believe you can get >240 pages without a typo :-) > > - 5 page 26: focussed -> focused? > > - t11FcSpAuIfStatOutAcceptedMsgs page 55: neighbouring -> neighboring? > > - t11FcSpPoSwMembAuthBehaviour page 89: neighbour -> neighbor? > (same in t11FcSpPoNaSwMembAuthBehaviour page 129 > > - t11FcSpPoSwConnAllowedNameType page 99: portname -> portName > > - t11FcSpSaIfTerminateAllSas page 183: outsanding -> outstanding > > Regards > > [EMAIL PROTECTED] > _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
