I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-imss-fc-fcsp-mib-02.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2008-06-19 IETF LC End Date: 2008-06-19 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Comments: I've found only a low number of editorial (i.e., to be handled by the RFC Editor) problems (spelling errors, typos, raw abbrevs, ...): (I've put a '?' after suggestions/questionable items, MIB names are for their descriptions) - ToC page 2: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments (i.e., US spelling, same in 7 page 232) - 1 page 3: IETF's -> IETF? (same in t11FcTcMIB page 27, t11FcSpAuthenticationMIB page 43, t11FcSpZoningMIB page 64, t11FcSpPolicyMIB page 77, t11FcSpSaMIB page 176, 7 page 232) - 3.2 page 11: HBAs -> Host Bus Adapters (usually abbrevs, including this one, should be introduced by it is the only use) - 3.4.7 page 17: introduce abbrevs: SSB (Server Session Begin), SSE (Server Session End), SW_ILS (Switch Fabric Internal Link Services); or extend them when they are used once in the introduction part: EACA -> Enhanced Acquire Change Authorization Request, ERCA -> Enhanced Release Change Authorization, SFC -> Stage Fabric Configuration - 4.9 page 25: the the -> the (and in t11FcSpAuRejDirection page 58, don't believe you can get >240 pages without a typo :-) - 5 page 26: focussed -> focused? - t11FcSpAuIfStatOutAcceptedMsgs page 55: neighbouring -> neighboring? - t11FcSpPoSwMembAuthBehaviour page 89: neighbour -> neighbor? (same in t11FcSpPoNaSwMembAuthBehaviour page 129 - t11FcSpPoSwConnAllowedNameType page 99: portname -> portName - t11FcSpSaIfTerminateAllSas page 183: outsanding -> outstanding Regards [EMAIL PROTECTED] _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
