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Document: draft-ietf-opsec-ip-security-05
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Jan-03-2011
IETF LC End Date: Dec-12-2010
IESG Telechat date: Unknown
Summary: This draft is ready as an Informational RFC.
Major issues: 0
Minor issues: 0
Nits/editorial comments: 9
Sorry for the late review, I note that this document is in
IESG evaluation state, so I suspect that one more revision
may be required. If so, I hope the following feedback aids
in improving an already excellent document.
1) S3.3.2.2, page 14 --- please expand the acronym "RED" on first use.
2) S3.5.1, top of end of page 16 and top of page 17 --- "Linux (and
Solaris) later set the IP Identification field on a per-IP address
basis." Which address --- source or destination?
3) S3.5.2.2, page 18 --- s/Packet loss is can be/Packet loss can be/
4) S3.6, underneath Figure 5 on page 20 ---
s/In Figure 3, an attacker/In Figure 5, an attacker/
5) Same section, same page ---
s/router that encounters that this/router to determine that this/
6) S3.7 --- when discussing the Fragment Offset, is it worth
stating that the Fragment Offset is measured in units of 8 octets
(thereby giving the magic number 65528 = 8191*8)?
7) S3.8.4, page 26, last bullet item at top of page ---
s/Four hops away from D./Two hops away from D./
8) S4.1.1.3, page 51, last paragraph of that subsection ---
Any references?
9) S4.1.1.4, page 52, first bullet item, first sentence ---
what do you mean by "overlapping fragments"? Maybe you meant,
instead, "duplicate fragments"?
Thanks,
- vijay
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