Hi, Vijay, Thanks so much for your feedback! -- Please find my response inline...
On 03/01/2011 03:05 p.m., Vijay K. Gurbani wrote: > 1) S3.3.2.2, page 14 --- please expand the acronym "RED" on first use. Will do. > 2) S3.5.1, top of end of page 16 and top of page 17 --- "Linux (and > Solaris) later set the IP Identification field on a per-IP address > basis." Which address --- source or destination? "destination" -- although "per-remote IP address" would probably be more correct clearer here. Thoughts? > 4) S3.6, underneath Figure 5 on page 20 --- > s/In Figure 3, an attacker/In Figure 5, an attacker/ Good grief! -- Will fix this one. > 5) Same section, same page --- > s/router that encounters that this/router to determine that this/ Yep, better. Will fix this. Thanks! > 6) S3.7 --- when discussing the Fragment Offset, is it worth > stating that the Fragment Offset is measured in units of 8 octets > (thereby giving the magic number 65528 = 8191*8)? This *is* mentioned in the first paragraph of Section 3.7, as follows: ---- cut here ---- It indicates where in the original datagram payload the payload of the fragment belongs, and is measured in units of eight bytes. ---- cut here ---- So I assume no changes needed here? > 7) S3.8.4, page 26, last bullet item at top of page --- > s/Four hops away from D./Two hops away from D./ The original text is incorrect, but I should s/Four/Three/ (rather than s/Four/Two/). -- Will fix this as I've indicated. > 8) S4.1.1.3, page 51, last paragraph of that subsection --- > Any references? One possible example would be the ping 'o death. -- I will provide references in the next rev of the document. > 9) S4.1.1.4, page 52, first bullet item, first sentence --- > what do you mean by "overlapping fragments"? Maybe you meant, > instead, "duplicate fragments"? No, I did mean "overlapping fragments" -- i.e., fragments that contain a portion of the same piece of original datagram (i.e., they overlap with each other) Thanks! Kind regards, -- Fernando Gont e-mail: [email protected] || [email protected] PGP Fingerprint: 7809 84F5 322E 45C7 F1C9 3945 96EE A9EF D076 FFF1 _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
