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Document: draft-jivsov-openpgp-ecc-10
Reviewer: Christer Holmberg
Review Date: 2012-03-19
IETF LC End Date: 2012-04-09
IESG Telechat date: (if known) 2012-04-09
Summary: The draft is ready for publication, with a couple of
editorial nits.
Major issues: -
Minor issues: -
Nits/editorial comments:
Q1: The "MPI" abbreviation is used throughout the document, but it is
not expanded anywhere, nor is there any reference.
Q2: The Abstract says:
"The document aims to standardize an optimal but narrow set of
parameters for best interoperability"
I think it would to make it more clear what interoperability you refer to.
Q3: The Abstract says:
"within the framework it defines"
However, the framework is not mentioned/clarified/defined
anywhere in the document, so if you want to talk about a framework I think some
clarification is needed.
Q4: In the Introduction, please add references to OpenPGP, RSA and DSA.
Also consider expansion on first occurrence.
Q5: The document uses "This document", "This specification", "This
draft" and "This standard" terminology. Please use consistent terminology.
Q6: In section 5, I don't think you need the "defined in" parts. Simply
add the reference.
Example: "Elliptic Curve Digital Signature
Algorithm (ECDSA) [FIPS 186-3],..."
Maybe similar changes can be done in some other parts of the
document also.
Q7: In section 5, consider modifying the following sentence:
"The section 9.1. Public-Key Algorithms of [RFC4880] is
expanded to define the following public key algorithm IDs"
To:
"This section extends section 9.1 (Public-Key Algorithms) or
[RFC4880], by defining the following public key algorithm IDs"
Q8: Section 5 says:
"Applications MUST support ECDSA and ECDH."
Please clarify what applications you refer to. I assume you
mean "Applications that implement this specification", or something similar...
The same comment also applies to section 12.1, and section 13
(the word is used many times in section 13, but it is enough to clarify it on
first occurrence :)
Regards,
Christer
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