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Francis Dupont writes:
 
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> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
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> Document: draft-ietf-rtgwg-cl-requirement-10.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 20130617
> IETF LC End Date: 20130619
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
>  
> Summary: Ready
>  
> Major issues: None
>  
> Minor issues: None

OK.  Thanks but it appears the document is headed back to another WGLC
due to other comments, mostly due to the RtgDir review comments.

> Nits/editorial comments:
>  - ToC page 3 and 7 page 12: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

It appears that both spellings are acceptable according to my spell
checker.  I will leave as is unless there is continued objection.

>  - 2 page 4: double include words in:
>  
>    The services supported include pseudowire based services (RFC 3985
>    [RFC3985]), including VPN services,
>  
>  I suggest something like:
>  
>    The supported services are, but not limited to, pseudowire based
>    services (RFC 3985 [RFC3985]), including VPN services,

Thank you.  I will make this change.

>  - 3 page 5 (component link): the term NPO is used before being defined
>  
>  - 3 page 5 (component link): expand the WDM abbrev -- not well known
>   according tothe RFC Editor list:
>   http://www.rfc-editor.org/rfc-style-guide/abbrev.expansion.txt
>  
>  - 3 page 5 (flow identification): same for the PW abbrev

A last call comment from our AD is to expand all acronyms before use.
The SecDir comments also requested this.

>  - 4.1 page 6: CAN -> MAY

Thank you.  I will make this change.

>  - 6 page 12 (MR#10) -> interpretted -> interpreted

Thank you.  My spell checker agrees.  I will make this change.

>  - 9 page 13: Encrption -> Encryption

Thank you.  I obviously didn't make spell check corrections in a
recent edit.  I will make this change.

I will also do a full spell check and see what else the spell checker
find.  (I am using International Ispell Version 3.3.02 12 Jun 2005
with English and American English dictionary files).

>  - Authors' Addresses: add the country (USA) in postal addresses

Thank you.  I will make this change.

> Regards
>  
> [email protected]

Thank you for the review of this document.

Curtis
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