Francis, This draft is headed back to WGLC, but I edited in the changes that you suggested, except as noted. See inline.
In message <[email protected]> Francis Dupont writes: > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-rtgwg-cl-requirement-10.txt > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review Date: 20130617 > IETF LC End Date: 20130619 > IESG Telechat date: unknown > > Summary: Ready > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits/editorial comments: > - ToC page 3 and 7 page 12: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments Acceptabel spelling AFAIK. > - 2 page 4: double include words in: > > The services supported include pseudowire based services (RFC 3985 > [RFC3985]), including VPN services, > > I suggest something like: > > The supported services are, but not limited to, pseudowire based > services (RFC 3985 [RFC3985]), including VPN services, This section was moved to the companion draft "Composite Link Use Cases and Design Considerations" at the request of the RtgDir review but the change has been made in that document. > - 3 page 5 (component link): the term NPO is used before being defined The term NPO conflicts with ITU-T usage of the term and is no longer used (another change prompted by the RtgDir review). > - 3 page 5 (component link): expand the WDM abbrev -- not well known > according tothe RFC Editor list: > http://www.rfc-editor.org/rfc-style-guide/abbrev.expansion.txt The paragraph provides non-essential discussion and was moved out of the definition and appears after the set of definitions. The acronyms were in a "for example" context and are now removed. The text now reads: A Component Link may be a point-to-point physical link (where a "physical link" includes one or more link layer plus a physical layer) or a logical link that preserves ordering in the steady state. A component link may have transient out of order events, but such events must not exceed the network's Performance Objectives. For example, a compoent link may be comprised of any supportable combination of link layers over a physical layer or over logical sub-layers, including those providing physical layer emulation. The examples given used the terms WDM, Ethernet, VLAN, SONET, and OTN but the examples are now gone. > - 3 page 5 (flow identification): same for the PW abbrev Done. > - 4.1 page 6: CAN -> MAY Done. > - 6 page 12 (MR#10) -> interpretted -> interpreted > > - 9 page 13: Encrption -> Encryption These two corrections were made. A spell check of the entire document was done and it caught a few more errors. > - Authors' Addresses: add the country (USA) in postal addresses Done > Regards > > [email protected] Thank you for the review. Please let me know if the changes are acceptable. Curtis _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
