Hi Jari,
Yes, the editorial comments are on my TODO for the next version. And
thanks Meral!
Best,
Yaron
On 10/16/2014 07:36 AM, Jari Arkko wrote:
Thanks for your review. (Have the authors seen the editorial nits? None of them
are significant to worry about, but just wanted to ensure that e-mails are
being seen.)
Jari
On 10 Oct 2014, at 15:56, Meral Shirazipour <[email protected]>
wrote:
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART,
please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq.
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may
receive.
Document: draft-ietf-uta-tls-attacks-04
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2014-10-10
IETF LC End Date: 2014-10-13
IESG Telechat date: 2014-10-16
Summary:
This draft is ready to be published as Informational RFC, but I have some
editorial comments .
Nits/editorial comments:
Nits:
-Abstract, please spell out Transport Layer Security (TLS) and Datagram
Transport Layer Security (DTLS), perhaps in Title too.
-Same comment for other acronyms, please spell out at first use: UTA work
group, SSL, NSA, Cipher Block Chaining (CBC),Message Authentication Code (MAC),
Cross-Site Request Forgery (CSRF),etc.
-[Page 5], Section 2.6
The below sentence was not clear-it would be good to add something about the
recommendation related to this statement.
"
For example, implementations of HTTP that use CSRF tokens
will need to randomize them even when the recommendations of
[I-D.ietf-uta-tls-bcp] are adopted.
"
-[Page 5], Section 2.10, please do not forget to add reference for TRIPLE-HS.
-[Page 6], Section 2.11, suggestion:
"other than originally intended"---->"other than the one originally intended"
-[Page 7], Section 3, suggestion
"adaptation of TLS for UDP datagrams."--->"adaptation of TLS for UDP"
Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson
Research
www.ericsson.com
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