Thanks. On 18 Oct 2014, at 14:29, Yaron Sheffer <[email protected]> wrote:
> Hi Jari, > > Yes, the editorial comments are on my TODO for the next version. And thanks > Meral! > > Best, > Yaron > > On 10/16/2014 07:36 AM, Jari Arkko wrote: >> Thanks for your review. (Have the authors seen the editorial nits? None of >> them are significant to worry about, but just wanted to ensure that e-mails >> are being seen.) >> >> Jari >> >> On 10 Oct 2014, at 15:56, Meral Shirazipour <[email protected]> >> wrote: >> >>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on >>> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at >>> http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq. >>> >>> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you >>> may receive. >>> >>> Document: draft-ietf-uta-tls-attacks-04 >>> Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour >>> Review Date: 2014-10-10 >>> IETF LC End Date: 2014-10-13 >>> IESG Telechat date: 2014-10-16 >>> >>> >>> Summary: >>> This draft is ready to be published as Informational RFC, but I have some >>> editorial comments . >>> >>> >>> Nits/editorial comments: >>> Nits: >>> -Abstract, please spell out Transport Layer Security (TLS) and Datagram >>> Transport Layer Security (DTLS), perhaps in Title too. >>> -Same comment for other acronyms, please spell out at first use: UTA work >>> group, SSL, NSA, Cipher Block Chaining (CBC),Message Authentication Code >>> (MAC), Cross-Site Request Forgery (CSRF),etc. >>> >>> -[Page 5], Section 2.6 >>> The below sentence was not clear-it would be good to add something about >>> the recommendation related to this statement. >>> " >>> For example, implementations of HTTP that use CSRF tokens >>> will need to randomize them even when the recommendations of >>> [I-D.ietf-uta-tls-bcp] are adopted. >>> >>> " >>> -[Page 5], Section 2.10, please do not forget to add reference for >>> TRIPLE-HS. >>> >>> -[Page 6], Section 2.11, suggestion: >>> "other than originally intended"---->"other than the one originally >>> intended" >>> >>> -[Page 7], Section 3, suggestion >>> "adaptation of TLS for UDP datagrams."--->"adaptation of TLS for UDP" >>> >>> Best Regards, >>> Meral >>> --- >>> Meral Shirazipour >>> Ericsson >>> Research >>> www.ericsson.com >>> _______________________________________________ >>> Gen-art mailing list >>> [email protected] >>> https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art >>
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