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Document: draft-ietf-xrblock-rtcp-xr-post-repair-loss-count-07
Reviewer: Tom Taylor
Review Date: 2014-12-24
IETF LC End Date: 2014-12-26
IESG Telechat date: 2015-01-08
Summary: This document is mostly to publish as a Proposed Standard, with
minor issues verging on editorial corrections.
Major issues: None.
Minor issues:
1) Second paragraph of Introduction: last sentence introduces the
"repaired loss count". I found this confusing. Figure 1 shows you really
meant "unrepaired loss count".
2) First paragraph of Section 3, third sentence: the ending currently reads:
"Some packets will not be repaired in the current
RTCP interval."
I think your point is that some of these could be repaired later, so I
suggest the text should be extended:
"Some packets will not be repaired in the current
RTCP interval, but could be repaired later."
3) I question whether RFCs 4588 and 5109 are normative for this
document, but I know this sort of thing is a difficult decision and I'll
accept whatever the final outcome is.
4) Appendix A: The "Units of Measurement" are packets.
Nits/editorial comments:
1) First paragraph of introduction:
s/contains/contain/ at end of first line.
Fourth sentence:
OLD
However, this metric is measured on media stream before
any loss repair mechanism, e.g., retransmission [RFC4588] and Forward
Error Correction (FEC) [RFC5109], is applied.
NEW
However, this metric is measured on the media stream before
^^^
any loss repair mechanism, e.g., retransmission [RFC4588] or Forward
^^
Error Correction (FEC) [RFC5109], is applied.
I would break this paragraph into three parts. The first three sentences
introduce the existing metric. The next two sentences, from "However,
..." to "... [RFC3550].", introduce the problem. The following two
sentences, from "Consequently ..." through "... higher overhead.", give
an attempted solution. The final sentence, I think, is the motivator for
this document and I would merge it into the next paragraph.
2) First paragrpah of Section 3: again, I suggest it be broken into
three parts. The second part would begin with "Thus it is RECOMMENDED
...", and the third with "The sequence number range ...".
3) The sentence preceding Figure 1 should identify "Figure 1" explicitly
(via XML2RFC cross-reference if that is what you are using). It should
also note that bit positions are given in octal -- the first time I've
seen that in a document, but it's OK with me.
5) Section 5, third line: s/confidentially/confidentiality/
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