Hi Robert, Are you ok with the suggested changes?
I suggest that we don't change the 3GPP scope. It would delay the draft, and nobody has shown any interest for non-3GPP usage. Regards, Christer -----Original Message----- From: Gen-art [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of Christer Holmberg Sent: 19. joulukuuta 2014 16:10 To: Robert Sparks; General Area Review Team Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Fwd: Gen-art LC review: draft-holmerg-dispatch-iotl-03.txt Hi, >> Nits/editorial comments: >> >>> Since you are providing an extension point for other values, someone >>> will ask if you need a registry for those values. I suggest >>> explicitly saying we are not creating a registry at this time but >>> expect to do so if the extension point is ever used to head that >>> conversation off. >> I could add the following text to the Syntax/General section: >> >> "This specification does not create an IANA registry for 'iotl' >> parameter values. >> If new parameters values are defined in the future, such registry needs >> to be >> created." >> >> Or, do you think it should be somewhere else? > It's fine there. However, I would change the last sentence to "A registry > should be considered if new parameter values are defined in the future". Ok. "This specification does not create an IANA registry for 'iotl' parameter values. A registry should be considered if new parameter values are defined in the future" --------------- >>> The sentence (which occurs in the abstract and introduction) "The >>> directionality in traffic legs relates to a SIP request creating a >>> dialogue and stand-alone SIP request." does not parse. What is it >>> trying to say, and why is it important? >> The sentence is not needed (and it doesn't belong in the Abstract to begin >> with), so I suggest to remove it. > You'll remove it from the introduction as well? Yes. Regards, Christer _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
