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Document: draft-ietf-tls-sslv3-diediedie-02
Reviewer: Tom Taylor
Review Date: 29 Mar 2015
IETF LC End Date: 30 Mar 20154
IESG Telechat date: (if known)
Summary: This document is good to go subject to the resolution of nits.
Note normative downrefs to Informational RFC 4492 and Historic RFC 6101.
Major issues:
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
1. IDNits has a number of complaints that should be resolved:
-- the UPDATES mentions RFC 5246 but it is not identified in the
Abstract. Rather, "the TLS RFCs" are cited. Could I suggest adding "and
explicitly RFC 5246" after that phrase. I can see where adding the
others would get into a bit of a mess because they are obsoleted.
-- a second IDNits complaint relates to missing RFC 2119 boilerplate.
-- finally, there are several complaints about references, at least
one of which is readily fixable.
-- the other complaints relate to references.
2. Editorial style: Introduction first sentence: I'd suggest moving the
phrase "since it was released in 1996" to the beginning of the sentence,
followed by a comma.
3. Incomplete thought: Introduction final sentence:
OLD
SSLv3 now follows.
NEW
This view is now extended to include SSLv3.
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