Thanks, we'll pick up editorials as we go, yes. S
On 09/04/15 12:36, Jari Arkko wrote: > Thanks for your review, Tom. Have you authors seen these comments? > > I have balloted NoObj, but wanted to check that the editorial comments were > not missed. > > Jari > > On 30 Mar 2015, at 02:21, Tom Taylor <[email protected]> wrote: > >> >> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on >> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at >> >> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. >> >> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments >> you may receive. >> >> Document: draft-ietf-tls-sslv3-diediedie-02 >> Reviewer: Tom Taylor >> Review Date: 29 Mar 2015 >> IETF LC End Date: 30 Mar 20154 >> IESG Telechat date: (if known) >> >> Summary: This document is good to go subject to the resolution of nits. Note >> normative downrefs to Informational RFC 4492 and Historic RFC 6101. >> >> Major issues: >> >> Minor issues: >> >> Nits/editorial comments: >> >> 1. IDNits has a number of complaints that should be resolved: >> -- the UPDATES mentions RFC 5246 but it is not identified in the Abstract. >> Rather, "the TLS RFCs" are cited. Could I suggest adding "and explicitly RFC >> 5246" after that phrase. I can see where adding the others would get into a >> bit of a mess because they are obsoleted. >> -- a second IDNits complaint relates to missing RFC 2119 boilerplate. >> -- finally, there are several complaints about references, at least one of >> which is readily fixable. >> -- the other complaints relate to references. >> >> 2. Editorial style: Introduction first sentence: I'd suggest moving the >> phrase "since it was released in 1996" to the beginning of the sentence, >> followed by a comma. >> >> 3. Incomplete thought: Introduction final sentence: >> >> OLD >> SSLv3 now follows. >> >> NEW >> This view is now extended to include SSLv3. >> >> _______________________________________________ >> Gen-art mailing list >> [email protected] >> https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art >
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