Thanks for your review, Tom. Have you authors seen these comments? I have balloted NoObj, but wanted to check that the editorial comments were not missed.
Jari On 30 Mar 2015, at 02:21, Tom Taylor <[email protected]> wrote: > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-tls-sslv3-diediedie-02 > Reviewer: Tom Taylor > Review Date: 29 Mar 2015 > IETF LC End Date: 30 Mar 20154 > IESG Telechat date: (if known) > > Summary: This document is good to go subject to the resolution of nits. Note > normative downrefs to Informational RFC 4492 and Historic RFC 6101. > > Major issues: > > Minor issues: > > Nits/editorial comments: > > 1. IDNits has a number of complaints that should be resolved: > -- the UPDATES mentions RFC 5246 but it is not identified in the Abstract. > Rather, "the TLS RFCs" are cited. Could I suggest adding "and explicitly RFC > 5246" after that phrase. I can see where adding the others would get into a > bit of a mess because they are obsoleted. > -- a second IDNits complaint relates to missing RFC 2119 boilerplate. > -- finally, there are several complaints about references, at least one of > which is readily fixable. > -- the other complaints relate to references. > > 2. Editorial style: Introduction first sentence: I'd suggest moving the > phrase "since it was released in 1996" to the beginning of the sentence, > followed by a comma. > > 3. Incomplete thought: Introduction final sentence: > > OLD > SSLv3 now follows. > > NEW > This view is now extended to include SSLv3. > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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