Thank you for your comments Jouni, I am going through them now and will post any queries or clarifications shortly.
Cheers James > On 4 Feb 2016, at 10:31 am, Jouni Korhonen <[email protected]> wrote: > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review > Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the > IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD > before posting a new version of the draft. For more information, please see > the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > > - Jouni > > Summary: > This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits > that should be fixed before publication. The nits are only > editorial. > > Comments: > > I do have little expertise on ECRIT topics in general so bear with me. > > * The I-D gives IDnits errors and stuff and those must be corrected. > Specifically those that concern the abstract, updating RFCs and such. > > * Starting from Section 1 (Intro) most of the acronyms are not expanded > on the first use.. or at all in the document. Revisit all acronyms > including HELD, LoST etc and expand them on the first use. > > * The sentence on line 185 (IDnits) took me a while to parse ;) Maybe > some rewording would make it a bit more readable. > > * There is no reference to "forest guide". I would expect to see one > and at least a note that it is a special instance of a LoST server. > > * In Section 4 URN is written multiple times as "urn". > > * On line 290 s/PSAPS/PSAPs > > * On lines 304 and 310 s/section/Section > > * On line 462 s/Layer 7/layer-7 > _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
