On 14/04/2010 22:31, Bruce Dubbs wrote:
> [email protected] wrote:
>
>> +  as a host for building the current book.  It is recommended you use the
>> +<quote>-nosrc</quote>  or<quote>-min</quote>  versions of the LiveCD with 
>> the
>   >  +  current book's instructions.
>
> I don't really like the "It is recommended..." phrase.  I think there
> are several alternatives:
>
> We recommend...
> You should use...
> [Currently] The best versions are...
>
> or a more complete rewrite:
>
> The<quote>-nosrc</quote>  or<quote>-min</quote>  editions of the LiveCD
> are the most appropriate versions for building a current LFS system.

Thanks for the review, Bruce.  I went with the last suggestion, which 
reads a lot better.

Regards,

Matt.
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