Hi :) YES, that's solved it!! :D
The Base bit is still a bit too wordy for something where we only want a brief mention of Base and the word "also" still really bothers me a LOT. Fixing that just means changing; "Base can also be used as a front-end" to "Base is a front-end" or even better just cut the whole paragraph down to something like; "Base is a full-featured desktop database that links closely with the other LibreOffice applications. Base is a powerful front-end to most enterprise-class databases such as MySql/MariaDB or PostgreSQL. So from 3 long and very wordy sentences down to 2 only medium wordy ones. The bullet-points are not driving me dotty anymore. It's all lined-up and looking great. The sentence about languages is smooth. Layout is MUCH better. There is a little white-space at the bottom of a few panels/columns that could most usefully be used to either 1. space-out the panel a bit to make it even easier on the eye OR 2. left as is. Either way would be fine. The white-space is not excessive and possibly isn't even enough to work with if going for option 1. It's most natural and comfortable the way it is so i think leaving as is would be best. Many thanks for all the hard work on this!! I think it's 99.9% perfect now. Great stuff! :D Thanks and regards from Tom :) >________________________________ > From: Jean Weber <[email protected]> >Sent: Sunday, 12 May 2013, 1:32 >Subject: Re: [libreoffice-marketing] Re: Brochure-type: General Information > > ><snip /> > >>>> We are trying to address Tom's complaint of p.2 panels 1 and 2. >>>> >>>> One of the corrections to the brochure that we could make is move the >>>> complete bulleted list started on panel 1 and move it to panel 2 ... and >>>> move the text from panel 2 --> panel 1. >>>> >>>> Just switching the text may address the spacing problem he mentions. Note >>>> that we should also consider the flow of information and see if moving the >>>> text has any impact on the "understandability" of the brochure. >>>> >>>> So, we may want to compare the versions of: >>>> >>>> https://wiki.documentfoundation.org/File:LibreOfficeV.4.0.x-CommunityBrochure-GeneralInformation-USLtr_JHW.odt >>>> USLtr_JHW version >>>> >>>> with the posted demonstration version of: >>>> >>>> http://www.parentreprise.com/images/LibreOffice/JuggledColumnsBrochurev4.0GeneralInformation.odt >>>> >>>> Should we adopt the moved text version? >>> >>> I'll look at the demo version a bit later when I have time, but I >>> think I can improve the bullet points indentation issue in another >>> way, less drastic that moving whole swags of text. Give me a few >>> hours. :-) >>> >>> --Jean >> >> >> I think the layout of the demo version (with the text switched) is >> definitely better visually. I'll apply my editorial changes to the >> text, and also tweak the indentation of the bullet lists, and get an >> updated copy to you later today. >> >> --Jean > > >Here is my latest iteration of the Letter version of the draft >brochure. See what you think. >https://wiki.documentfoundation.org/File:LO4-CommunityBrochure-GeneralInfo-USLtr_JHW_rev.odt >https://wiki.documentfoundation.org/File:LO4-CommunityBrochure-GeneralInfo-USLtr_JHW_rev.pdf > >I'll do the A4 version if you like this one. > >--Jean > > -- To unsubscribe e-mail to: [email protected] Problems? http://www.libreoffice.org/get-help/mailing-lists/how-to-unsubscribe/ Posting guidelines + more: http://wiki.documentfoundation.org/Netiquette List archive: http://listarchives.libreoffice.org/global/marketing/ All messages sent to this list will be publicly archived and cannot be deleted
