On Fri, Jul 25, 2014 at 11:22:44AM -0700, patrick keshishian wrote: > On 7/25/14, Edward <[email protected]> wrote: > > Hi, > > > > The original wording doesn't seems to flow too well: > > > > "Create pkg/PLIST. After the install is complete use the developer's > > command, make plist which makes the file PLIST in the pkg directory. > > This file is a candidate packing list." > > > > I would like to suggest changing to the followig: > > > > "Create pkg/PLIST. After the installation is done, use the developer's > > command make plist, which creates the file PLIST in pkg sub-directory. > > It will be a template for this port." > > I don't think definition of the word "template" fits this > use-case. What issue do you have with the original > wording? > > --patrick >
Hi Patrick, Refering to this sentence: "After the install is complete use the developer's command, make plist which makes the file PLIST in the pkg directory." There's 3 points to make in this original sentence: 1. "After the install is complete" 2. "use the developer's command, make plist" 3. "which makes the file PLIST in the pkg directory." Which I think should be broken up with commas so that it appears clearer. And thus my suggestion to change it to: "After the installation is done, use the developer's command make plist, which creates the file PLIST in pkg sub-directory." As for the last sentences, "This file is a candidate packing list.", I think the word "candidate" usually refers to a person than an object. But I do agree, "template" might not be as good. Regards, Edward.
