[Matt]
If, for the sake of discussion, we stipulate Dan and I as the epitome of
mealymouthed, back-talking, then Krimel, you are our exact opposite, a
blunt, guileless philistine.

Now, I don't think either is true, but they represent the poorer of ways of
understanding what I see as different rhetorical strategies.

[Krimel]
I was about to put you down for a fruit basket on 'that great day' until
upon reflection I noticed that the only serious bone I have to pick with
what you say is your suggestion of the possibility that I am not a blunt,
guileless philistine. DM is always trying to get a pole started around here
and I am willing to bet that the nearest thing to a consensus that exists on
this forum is that Krimel is a blunt, guileless philistine.

[Matt]
I think it the lesser part of wisdom (read: stupid) to think that there is a
single context in which people are to be read, that we have true, pure
voices that should be heard for what they are no matter the audience before
us.  Dan can be read as thinking that, and so can you, and I think you're
both wrong.

It is about persuasion, it is about effect, it is about doing something in a
space that has been provided, space that is created by a stipulated
audience, real or imaginary.  We all have voices, but to think we can't, or
shouldn't, modulate them, is to think that singing is best when there's one
note.  That's just not the point of singing.

In other words, you can swear all you like Krimel, but who are you talking
to?  Who are you trying to convince of what?  And: might there be a better
way?

As Pirsig said, "Hey baby, it be rhetoric all the way down.  GET DOWN
TONIGHT.  GET DOWN TONIGHT."  Or something like that.

[Krimel]
I took the topic of this thread to be style and if I wasn't specific I hope
it was clear that I was talking for the most part about my style,
rationalizing, if you will, why I write like a blunt, guileless philistine.
I have an aversion to ritual and niceties but I readily concede the aversion
is a personal peccadillo. I suspect that often in my zeal to eschew them I
do indeed sound like a flaming asshole. Those who know me well though, would
confirm that this is not just an affectation.

Certainly any of us who have persevered here for any length of time have had
ample opportunity to express the same ideas in a variety styles and we
modulate our modes of expression to match some perceived notion of what is
likely to appeal or irritate to our partners in dialogue at every go around.


Dan seemed to see this as a negative; as a tedious cycle of endless return.
I like to think of it as opportunity to try harder, to do better, to try
something else. After all, by way of example, the effectiveness of profanity
is inversely proportional to the frequency of its use.

If I have a stylistic goal here it is to avoid being locked into a single
style. Doubtless I fail, but I do strive to swing between smart assery and
sagedom; between gravity and levity; between being pedantic and being
poetic. I do notice of late that I have developed an unhealthy love of the
semi-colon.

I suspect you are right though, there is always a better way. My point was,
aren't we all here looking for just that?

[Matt]
All of which is to say: just about everything everybody says on the topic of
plains-spoken is almost inevitably right at some point, but not at all
points--what we take to be good, effective writing always depends on the
perspective and taste of the reader.  The point of a forum is to toss out
ideas to see if they stick, but what if you don't know what the idea is yet?
Might silence be a good idea?  We are here to sharpen our voices, but is all
help the same?  Does everybody respond in the same way to the same kind of
teacher?  Do all teachers teach every student in the same way?

[Krimel]
One of the things about MoQ.org that gives it the addictive quality that Dan
alluded to and that you have touched on, is the over all high quality of the
writing here. For a bunch of amateurs the people here are surprisingly good.
>From Craig's sparse syllogisms to Ham's nested definitions wrapped in double
negatives, not a day goes by that someone here doesn't say something that is
entertaining, thought provoking or both.

Much of what I was ranting about was aimed at Dan's admission that he writes
drafts but doesn't share them and his claim that words can not express the
purity of certain ideas. That does not seem to me to be silence motivated by
uncertainty. I enjoy Dan's writing. I'd love to see more of it. I don't
think I am alone in that. Also I am pretty confident I am on Dan's ignore
list. At some point I failed to exhibit a properly respectful tone in our
exchanges, ironically as I recall it had something to do with his suggestion
that I might benefit from meditation and my overly prosaic response to the
suggestion.

[Matt]
Dan _was_ saying, "Fucking college boy!," but he also wanted to say
something else, something that if he'd led off with that, wouldn't really
have been rhetorically permitted.  Or, he wasn't saying that, because he
doesn't swear and that kind of verbiage doesn't come to him as it does to
you or I.  Choice in words doesn't ever reduce to a few set ideas that we
can dress in different ways.  The choice of words _are_ the ideas, and the
way we put the idea determines what we are saying.  We can be brusque, or
pedantic.  We can be witty, or boorish.  All of these things determine our
voice, our ideas, our "I".

Some people think I'm quite unintelligible because of the way I write, the
things I say.  Perfectly fine, but in a certain way, some of the things I
say can't be put in a different way, can't be "cleaned up" and put more
straight-forwardly.  To think there is something called "plain-spoken" that
is the _only_ way to write is to mount shackles on people, to tell them that
if their "I" doesn't fit into this box, they should get the fuck out of
here.  But we know what Pirsig thinks about people who fall outside the
mythos.

[Krimel]
I'm not so sure that words _are_ ideas or that they determine ideas in the
way you suggest. Rather I would hope that ideas determine what words we use
and that the words we use modulate the tone or shade the meaning of the
ideas we express. So sure, the choice of language and the order of
presentation may lead us around the bush but in the end you're still a
fucking college boy. You are just a slightly less insulted college boy or
you might even be flattered to be one. You know, you might even want to put
it on a T-shirt and dress it that way. 

If you are looking for feedback, I don't find your writing unintelligible or
mealy-mouthed. Obtuse, wordy and a bit pretentious, perhaps, but I expect no
less from a fucking college boy. I hope nothing I have said suggests that I
think there is a right way to go about this business. It is the diversity of
thought and modes of expression that makes this place fun. Most of us here
are familiar enough with each other that we could probably write each others
posts. For example I think it would be fun for Arlo and Platt to switch
sides every once in a while. 

While we are on the topic of writing technique why to you use _ instead of "
sometimes, as in _was_ as opposed to "I" above?

[Matt]
p.s.  I think you're absolutely right that "After a while it isn't hard to
tell when the words are sincere and when they sincerely mean, 'Professor
Puffalicious is a insufferable dipshit.'"  It's why I fell in love with
academic writing: read enough of it, and the secret doors of its style open
up and release all sorts of little jokes.  What can I say: I love being an
insider!

[Krimel]
I find these particular academics as trifle dense to read but I love to
listen to them. They are mainly theologians and religious historians brought
in by the religion and philosophy department. I sometimes think they are
intentionally using double speak because if they were plain spoken they
would get crucified, so to speak. But you are correct. You really wouldn't
have a clue how subversive much of what they say is, if you were listening
from the outside.




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