Hi,
I reviewed the I-D and have the following feedback to the Authors: · Overall, a very well-written and complete document. I support it progressing on the Experimental track. · However, I did have the following editorial points for the authors to consider: o The following spelling mistakes should be corrected: § In section 4.1.2 and 6.1, "octects" should be changed to "octets" § In section 8, "tosecure" should be changed to "to secure" o Should you define "SIAL" in the Terminology (section 2) and also use it in the main body of the I-D? I noted that currently you only used the term in the Title and the Appendix so an alternate comment is whether you really needed to use this term at all? o Should re-write first sentence of Section 7. The sentence is too long and hard to parse. · Finally, I had one technical question. I did not really understand what you were trying to imply by your first requirement in section 1.1? The requirement talks about being "applicable to any kind of MN". I don't recall this type of requirement in the other Multimob related I-Ds. What is the significance of specifying this requirement? Best Regards, Akbar From: [email protected] [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of Behcet Sarikaya Sent: Monday, July 15, 2013 12:34 PM To: [email protected] Subject: [multimob] draft-ietf-multimob-handover-optimization-03 Folks, This message starts a four week Multimob Working Group last call on advancing: Title : PMIPv6 multicast handover optimization by the Subscription Information Acquisition through the LMA (SIAL) Author(s) : Luis M. Contreras Carlos J. Bernardos Ignacio Soto Filename : draft-ietf-multimob-handover-optimization-03.txt Pages : 37 Date : 2013-07-08 as Experimental. Substantive comments and statements of support for advancing this document should be directed to the mailing list. Editorial suggestions can be sent to the authors. This last call will end on August 9, 2013. Regards, Behcet
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