On Thu, 14 Feb 2002, Clark Peterson wrote: > OK, > > Here is my most recent version. Notice a few changes, including how I > did the reused OGC from CC and CC2. > > Comments please.
I think it looks great. The only things I'd ask about are the same as Brad & Sixten have raised about some things that seem redundant. I don't think it hurts anything by having them in there, but also not sure if it's really necessary. Here are some specific comments. But they're just comments, don't feel that I'm really saying anything needs to be changed. > 4. All artwork, illustration, graphic design, maps, and cartography, > including any text contained within such artwork, illustration, maps > or cartography; This one has already been discussed once. While I agree that with others who've stated that it's really not necessary to claim anything that is not text as PI given how you've designated OGC, I also think it's a good idea to re-enforce that various types of artwork can't be used since someone's likely to make mistake if it's not done. But I'm wondering about the addition you made concerning "including and text contained ...". Just seems really unnecessary to me, since as part of the artwork I'd think it's automatically included in the first part of the statement. And I'm also curious if my explanation of why someone may have thought the art was OGC if the art included text was the reason for the addition. If so, I think I did you a disservice. > 5. The names of the following characters or places, but not their stat > blocks (if any): Londar Brightrain, Baron Kurell, Alfguir K�Eliek, > Learah Relight, Ander Fierk, Xanthaque, Hampton Hill, Arn�s Mountain > and Horgrim�s Temple; I think this is fine but just wondering if others think it needs to be more specific. That is rather than just saying "characters or places" does it need to mention the it is the character/place names, history, description, etc. that are PI. Personally I think all of that is assumed by stating that the character/place is PI, but curious as to how others feel. Guess this is just one of those questions where I understand my thinking but wonder how much I can actually extrapolate out from that. For example, I don't think saying "all game rules are OGC" works, because I don't think it's reasonable to expect people to fully agree on what are game rules. I do think it's fine to say "all characters are PI" because I think people generally know what a character is, and that a character includes the name, physical description, background, and history. > 6. This module uses Open Game Content from both the Creature > Collection and Creature Collection 2: Dark Menagerie published by > Sword & Sorcery Studios. That Open Game Content includes content > designated as Product Identity. Such Product Identity is used here by > specific permission. Any such content that was previously designated > as Product Identity is hereby designated as Product Identity by reason > of being so designated in the original work. The following list > details the Open Game Content used in this product, its source and any > Product Identity designation: Perhaps a bit wordy. I think the sentence "Any such content that was ... in the original work." could probably be lifted without any effect on what you are saying since you go on to designate PI for each item in the list. I thought the list of items was very clear. > The above Product Identity is not Open Game Content and reproduction > or use without the written permission of the copyright holder is > expressly forbidden, except for the purpose of review. same as Brad & Sixten - seems to just be restating the requirements of the license. If that's all it's doing I don't really see a harm, other than it causes some people who are familiar with the license like those of us on this list to wondering if it's suppose to mean something more. But that's as much or more our fault for trying to read the thing too closely as it is yours. :) alec _______________________________________________ Ogf-l mailing list [EMAIL PROTECTED] http://mail.opengamingfoundation.org/mailman/listinfo/ogf-l
