On 27/05/11 02:03, rich wrote:
On Thursday 26 May 2011 3:57:37 pm Tim Serong wrote:
On 20/05/11 06:30, Jos Poortvliet wrote:
On Tuesday 17 May 2011 09:00:50 jdd wrote:
Le 16/05/2011 23:24, Jos Poortvliet a écrit :
But we're back in Business, Karl Cheney has made an updated version -
and here it is. Let us know your thoughts, esp when it comes to
refining the text!!!
Please take into account local customisation and translation.
I mean that of course we need the source, but also that when printing
locally, color is unavailable as shown on the project. It's pretty
easy (and in France mandatory - blank paper is only authorized for
government papers for public diffusion) to use color paper, but then
of course the color is the same everywhere nd the photo only B&W
that said, the document is very smart :-)
thanks
jdd
Hmm, what you are saying is that we need a black-and-white version, yes?
Karl, can you do that in a reasonable way, you think, or does that
require a lot of re-design?
Moreover, Karl, you mentioned the text is a tad long and for an A4
version we need to shorten it... Could you send the text that is too much
to me in a separate mail, I'll munch over it and shorten it a bit. Please
tell me by how much approximately I need to shorten it...
I found a couple of typos:
- Working Together:
"...supporting 21 distro’s on seven architectures." - remove the
apostrophe in "distros".
- For Users:
"But shoulld you want more..." - should be "should"
- For Administrators:
"It’s powerful and flexibile with it’s unique command line" - remove
apostrophe in second "its".
- Get Connected:
- Twitter.com and Identi.ca should probably be lower case.
- SUSE Studio:
- "customized with your packages, script and artwork" - suggest
pluralizing "scripts".
- "desktop Choice" heading should be "Desktop Choice" (upper case)
- Tumbleweed:
URL is http://en.opensuse.org/tumbleweed - all other URLs lack the
protocol specifier (not sure if this is intentional).
Nice brochure, BTW :)
Regards,
Tim
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I think "It’s powerful and flexibile with it’s unique command line" is OK.
The second "it's" is indicating possession whereas the first "it's" is
indicating a contraction of it is. both correct usages afaik.
Yep, the first "it's" is a contraction of "it is". But the second "its"
is a possessive pronoun, for which apostrophes should never be used (see
rules 9 and 10 at http://www.grammarbook.com/punctuation/apostro.asp).
(Actually, if you're really bored^H^H^H want to get really technical,
apostrophes *always* indicate contractions - the reason they're used for
possessive nouns, e.g.: "John's cat" is because in Old English that
would have been "Johnes cat", and the apostrophe indicates the removal
of the "e" - see http://www.users.zetnet.co.uk/pcrrn/apostrophe/page3.htm)
Regards,
Tim
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Senior Clustering Engineer, OPS Engineering, Novell Inc.
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