Subject to resolving Juergen's comments satisfactorily, yes, I am ok
with it.

Tom Petch


----- Original Message -----
From: "Juergen Schoenwaelder" <[email protected]>
To: "Warren Kumari" <[email protected]>
Sent: Friday, February 20, 2015 4:49 PM
>
> I have reviewed this document and I support it moving forward. There
> are a couple of nits that should be fixed before submitting the
> document to the IESG.
>
> Section 7.1:
>
>  - replace "MIB" with "MIB module"
>
> Section 7.2:
>
>  - replace "The SNMP Management Architecture
>    MIB (SNMP-FRAMEWORK-MIB)" with "SNMP-FRAMEWORK-MIB"
>
>  - remove "Therefore, the use of the HMAC-SHA2 authentication
>    protocols requires the usage of the objects defined in the
>    SNMP-FRAMEWORK-MIB." since this sentence is not needed
>
> Section 7.3:
>
>   - replace "IMPORTS objects" with "IMPORTS definitions"
>
> Section 8:
>
>  - The comment behind LAST-UPDATED is wrong (this happens once
>    there is redundant information)
>
>  - The DESCRIPTION clause of the MODULE-IDENTITY macro says that there
>    is supplementary information at IANA. I am not sure what this
means.
>    Perhaps this last paragraph needs to be changed to what other
recent
>    MIB modules include, namely a short version of the copyright
>    statement. See for example RFC 7331.
>
>  - This may be wrong: usmHMAC384SHA12AuthProtocol (a 5 missing)
>
>  - The MIB modules compiles using smilint after fixing the RFC Ed.
>    comments below the definition of usmHMAC256SHA384AuthProtocol and
>    usmHMAC384SHA12AuthProtocol.
>
> Section 9.1:
>
>  - I think this sentence should be changed to this:
>
>    The security considerations of [RFC3414] also apply to the
>    HMAC-SHA-2 authentication protocols defined in this document.
>
> /js
>
> --
> Juergen Schoenwaelder           Jacobs University Bremen gGmbH
> Phone: +49 421 200 3587         Campus Ring 1 | 28759 Bremen | Germany
> Fax:   +49 421 200 3103         <http://www.jacobs-university.de/>
>

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