Hi there, I have some quick comments on this draft:
1. There is a typo in section 1 “Another factor which drive this work is that tThe network architectures are rapidly changing with the migration toward private and public clouds.” tThe->the 2. In section 1, you have "A series of use cases are defined in "Use Case Draft"." But there is no reference to these use cases. Or how about use a section to include the use case within this draft? 3. In section 3, " 1) CASM Application " The figure 1 shows several CASM Applications. It's better to clarify how these applications may act differently. If only for different users, based on the reading of this part, it's better to have just one "CASM Client" in the figure. 4. In section 3, "2) CASM Coordinator" Figure 1 shows two components "pool management" and "address management". It's better to clarify these two functional components in this section. 5. In section 4, in the first procedure, how about enabling the operators to indicate the address allocation policies or so? 6. In section 5, it's better to address how the required interfaces can map to the "pool management", "address management" and "address database" as in the CASM Coordinator. 7. Section 6. What's the relationship between this use case and the mentioned use cases in section 1? Regards, Tianran ---------------------------------------------------------------------- From: lichen....@chinatelecom.cn [mailto:lichen....@chinatelecom.cn] Sent: Tuesday, July 03, 2018 10:31 AM To: opsawg <opsawg@ietf.org> Cc: lichen.bri <lichen....@chinatelecom.cn>; Tianran Zhou <zhoutian...@huawei.com>; xiechf.bri <xiechf....@chinatelecom.cn> Subject: 转发: New Version Notification for draft-li-opsawg-address-pool-management-arch-01 Hi all, We have updated the new version of I-D, draft-li-opsawg-address-pool-management-arch-01.txt, the revision was made based on the comments raised in London meeting, Telecom Italia also provided a new use case afterwards, which was also included in this new draft. Here is the link of the draft . wish for your comments, Thanks. https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-li-opsawg-address-pool-management-arch/ Best Regards, Chen Li ============================== Chen Li Network Evolution and Planning Center Network Technology & Planning Department China Telecom Corporation Limited Beijing Research Institute Email：lichen....@chinatelecom.cn Tel: +86-10-50902891 Mobile: +86-18910853955 发件人： lichen....@chinatelecom.cn 发送时间： 2018-07-03 10:05 收件人： casm 抄送： lichen.bri; zhoutianran; jclarke; xiechf.bri; 孙雪媛 主题： New Version Notification for draft-li-opsawg-address-pool-management-arch-01 Hi all, We have updated the new version of I-D, draft-li-opsawg-address-pool-management-arch-01.txt, the revision was made based on the comments raised in London meeting, Telecom Italia also provided a new use case afterwards, which was also included in this new draft. Here is the link of the draft . wish for your comments, Thanks. https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-li-opsawg-address-pool-management-arch/ Best Regards, Chen Li ============================== Chen Li Network Evolution and Planning Center Network Technology & Planning Department China Telecom Corporation Limited Beijing Research Institute Email：lichen....@chinatelecom.cn Tel: +86-10-50902891 Mobile: +86-18910853955 _______________________________________________ OPSAWG mailing list OPSAWG@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/opsawg
