Hi, Tianran, Thanks for your comments. Please refer to my reply inline, and we could modify some errors and submit a new version , when the submisson open again.
Best Regards, Chen Li ----------------------------------------------------- 1. There is a typo in section 1 “Another factor which drive this work is that tThe network architectures are rapidly changing with the migration toward private and public clouds.” tThe->the <Chen> delete t 2. In section 1, you have "A series of use cases are defined in "Use Case Draft"." But there is no reference to these use cases. Or how about use a section to include the use case within this draft? <Chen> add the draft to the reference which is expired. https://www.ietf.org/archive/id/draft-xie-ps-centralized-address-management-02.txt 3. In section 3, " 1) CASM Application " The figure 1 shows several CASM Applications. It's better to clarify how these applications may act differently. If only for different users, based on the reading of this part, it's better to have just one "CASM Client" in the figure. <Chen> CASM Application refers to various address applications, such as address service management and address log management. Application may be more appropriate than the client. 4. In section 3, "2) CASM Coordinator" Figure 1 shows two components "pool management" and "address management". It's better to clarify these two functional components in this section. <Chen> the "pool management" is to manage an address block, and the "address management" is to manage address blocks and some specific addresses. "pool management" is a way to achieve "address management". 5. In section 4, in the first procedure, how about enabling the operators to indicate the address allocation policies or so? <Chen> “This is a very good point, the address allocation policies should be added in later version. “ 6. In section 5, it's better to address how the required interfaces can map to the "pool management", "address management" and "address database" as in the CASM Coordinator. <Chen> we plan to write another draft about the YANG model of the interfaces mapping to the components mentioned in this draft . Do I get the point of the comment ? 7. Section 6. What's the relationship between this use case and the mentioned use cases in section 1? <Chen> if we want to add the new cases to the use case draft, do you think it is ok ? Regards, Tianran ---------------------------------------------------------------------- From: [email protected] [mailto:[email protected]] Sent: Tuesday, July 03, 2018 10:31 AM To: opsawg <[email protected]> Cc: lichen.bri <[email protected]>; Tianran Zhou <[email protected]>; xiechf.bri <[email protected]> Subject: 转发: New Version Notification for draft-li-opsawg-address-pool-management-arch-01 Hi all, We have updated the new version of I-D, draft-li-opsawg-address-pool-management-arch-01.txt, the revision was made based on the comments raised in London meeting, Telecom Italia also provided a new use case afterwards, which was also included in this new draft. Here is the link of the draft . wish for your comments, Thanks. https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-li-opsawg-address-pool-management-arch/ Best Regards, Chen Li ============================== Chen Li Network Evolution and Planning Center Network Technology & Planning Department China Telecom Corporation Limited Beijing Research Institute Email：[email protected] Tel: +86-10-50902891 Mobile: +86-18910853955 发件人： [email protected] 发送时间： 2018-07-03 10:05 收件人： casm 抄送： lichen.bri; zhoutianran; jclarke; xiechf.bri; 孙雪媛 主题： New Version Notification for draft-li-opsawg-address-pool-management-arch-01 Hi all, We have updated the new version of I-D, draft-li-opsawg-address-pool-management-arch-01.txt, the revision was made based on the comments raised in London meeting, Telecom Italia also provided a new use case afterwards, which was also included in this new draft. Here is the link of the draft . wish for your comments, Thanks. https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-li-opsawg-address-pool-management-arch/ Best Regards, Chen Li ============================== Chen Li Network Evolution and Planning Center Network Technology & Planning Department China Telecom Corporation Limited Beijing Research Institute Email：[email protected] Tel: +86-10-50902891 Mobile: +86-18910853955
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