Hi Alex, Nice idea. Here are a couple of things you could improve:
- I would replace the front page with just the logo and the url. - use a white background because the screenshots will look better as they have behind a white background that looks ugly due to the rounded corners of the windows (see for example slide 7). Alternatively, you can set the background of the Pharo image to black and retake the screenshots. - in any case, the motif of the background does not help. - Slide 2 is weak and tries to do too much. The text in parantehesis is not needed given that your audience is new to Smalltalk. What is Seaside? I would suggest to make a dedicated part of the presentation Seaside-related. The line in italics is confusing. Use the logo instead of the title. Remove the bullets :). In fact, I would make the logo appear in the same place as on the previous slide, and only change the text. This will make for a nice transition. - the screenshot on Slide 6 has too small fonts - On Slide 7 you use centered text, but everywhere else you use left aligned text. Stick with the left aligned one. - Slide 12 needs some alignment. I would suggest to make the blue regions the same width and height and align them vertically. - Also, I think the font of the white text from slide 12 is not as light as it is in the rest of the presenation. - The explanations in red on slide 13,14 are too small and not useful like that. Make them bigger. Potentially you can also use animations to introduce them. - Slide 15 needs alignment - The green in Slide 16 does not look nice :). If you replace the black background with white, it will fit better. Alternatively, you have to edit the diagram again in omnigraffle and make white on black. In fact you anyway have to edit the diagram to make it use the same font as in the presentation (which I guess is Helvetica Neue Light) - Slide 17 needs alignment - Slide 18 is not so useful. - Slide 19 has too many messages. What does that mean strong community? - No need for the bullets on Slide 20 - I won't say anything about slide 21 :) Cheers, Doru On Feb 5, 2009, at 7:43 PM, Bill Schwab wrote: > Alexandre, > > That looks pretty good. I would probably get the debugger to show > itself off just a bit more - if only by picking a more interesting > method for the source pane. > > You said that all control structures are realized by message sends. > Is > that really true? What about optimizations? > > Bill > > > > Wilhelm K. Schwab, Ph.D. > University of Florida > Department of Anesthesiology > PO Box 100254 > Gainesville, FL 32610-0254 > > Email: [email protected] > Tel: (352) 273-6785 > FAX: (352) 392-7029 > >>>> [email protected] 02/05/09 12:32 PM >>> > > Dear List, > > I made up few slides about Pharo. The goal is to give in less than 30 > minutes the essence of Pharo. > Please, shot at me, I like that :-) > > http://bergel.eu/Pharo.pdf > > I provide the .keynote upon request. > > Alexandre > -- > _,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;: > Alexandre Bergel http://www.bergel.eu > ^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;. > > > > > > > _______________________________________________ > Pharo-project mailing list > [email protected] > http://lists.gforge.inria.fr/cgi-bin/mailman/listinfo/pharo-project > > > _______________________________________________ > Pharo-project mailing list > [email protected] > http://lists.gforge.inria.fr/cgi-bin/mailman/listinfo/pharo-project -- www.tudorgirba.com "Every thing should have the right to be different." _______________________________________________ Pharo-project mailing list [email protected] http://lists.gforge.inria.fr/cgi-bin/mailman/listinfo/pharo-project
