I will take your comments into account, thanks Doru Alexandre
On 5 Feb 2009, at 20:08, Tudor Girba wrote: > Hi Alex, > > Nice idea. Here are a couple of things you could improve: > > - I would replace the front page with just the logo and the url. > > - use a white background because the screenshots will look better as > they have behind a white background that looks ugly due to the rounded > corners of the windows (see for example slide 7). Alternatively, you > can set the background of the Pharo image to black and retake the > screenshots. > > - in any case, the motif of the background does not help. > > - Slide 2 is weak and tries to do too much. The text in parantehesis > is not needed given that your audience is new to Smalltalk. What is > Seaside? I would suggest to make a dedicated part of the presentation > Seaside-related. The line in italics is confusing. Use the logo > instead of the title. Remove the bullets :). In fact, I would make the > logo appear in the same place as on the previous slide, and only > change the text. This will make for a nice transition. > > - the screenshot on Slide 6 has too small fonts > > - On Slide 7 you use centered text, but everywhere else you use left > aligned text. Stick with the left aligned one. > > - Slide 12 needs some alignment. I would suggest to make the blue > regions the same width and height and align them vertically. > > - Also, I think the font of the white text from slide 12 is not as > light as it is in the rest of the presenation. > > - The explanations in red on slide 13,14 are too small and not useful > like that. Make them bigger. Potentially you can also use animations > to introduce them. > > - Slide 15 needs alignment > > - The green in Slide 16 does not look nice :). If you replace the > black background with white, it will fit better. Alternatively, you > have to edit the diagram again in omnigraffle and make white on black. > In fact you anyway have to edit the diagram to make it use the same > font as in the presentation (which I guess is Helvetica Neue Light) > > - Slide 17 needs alignment > > - Slide 18 is not so useful. > > - Slide 19 has too many messages. What does that mean strong > community? > > - No need for the bullets on Slide 20 > > - I won't say anything about slide 21 :) > > > > > Cheers, > Doru > > > On Feb 5, 2009, at 7:43 PM, Bill Schwab wrote: > >> Alexandre, >> >> That looks pretty good. I would probably get the debugger to show >> itself off just a bit more - if only by picking a more interesting >> method for the source pane. >> >> You said that all control structures are realized by message sends. >> Is >> that really true? What about optimizations? >> >> Bill >> >> >> >> Wilhelm K. Schwab, Ph.D. >> University of Florida >> Department of Anesthesiology >> PO Box 100254 >> Gainesville, FL 32610-0254 >> >> Email: [email protected] >> Tel: (352) 273-6785 >> FAX: (352) 392-7029 >> >>>>> [email protected] 02/05/09 12:32 PM >>> >> >> Dear List, >> >> I made up few slides about Pharo. The goal is to give in less than 30 >> minutes the essence of Pharo. >> Please, shot at me, I like that :-) >> >> http://bergel.eu/Pharo.pdf >> >> I provide the .keynote upon request. >> >> Alexandre >> -- >> _,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;: >> Alexandre Bergel http://www.bergel.eu >> ^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;. >> >> >> >> >> >> >> _______________________________________________ >> Pharo-project mailing list >> [email protected] >> http://lists.gforge.inria.fr/cgi-bin/mailman/listinfo/pharo-project >> >> >> _______________________________________________ >> Pharo-project mailing list >> [email protected] >> http://lists.gforge.inria.fr/cgi-bin/mailman/listinfo/pharo-project > > -- > www.tudorgirba.com > > "Every thing should have the right to be different." > > > > > _______________________________________________ > Pharo-project mailing list > [email protected] > http://lists.gforge.inria.fr/cgi-bin/mailman/listinfo/pharo-project > -- _,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;: Alexandre Bergel http://www.bergel.eu ^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;. _______________________________________________ Pharo-project mailing list [email protected] http://lists.gforge.inria.fr/cgi-bin/mailman/listinfo/pharo-project
