Sure Alexandre
On 5 Feb 2009, at 21:45, Adrian Lienhard wrote: > Alex, could you post a new version afterwards? I'll then take another > look and give you further feedback, if you want. > We can also put the slides on the web page. > > Cheers, > Adrian > > On Feb 5, 2009, at 21:31 , Alexandre Bergel wrote: > >> I will take your comments into account, thanks Doru >> >> Alexandre >> >> >> On 5 Feb 2009, at 20:08, Tudor Girba wrote: >> >>> Hi Alex, >>> >>> Nice idea. Here are a couple of things you could improve: >>> >>> - I would replace the front page with just the logo and the url. >>> >>> - use a white background because the screenshots will look better as >>> they have behind a white background that looks ugly due to the >>> rounded >>> corners of the windows (see for example slide 7). Alternatively, you >>> can set the background of the Pharo image to black and retake the >>> screenshots. >>> >>> - in any case, the motif of the background does not help. >>> >>> - Slide 2 is weak and tries to do too much. The text in parantehesis >>> is not needed given that your audience is new to Smalltalk. What is >>> Seaside? I would suggest to make a dedicated part of the >>> presentation >>> Seaside-related. The line in italics is confusing. Use the logo >>> instead of the title. Remove the bullets :). In fact, I would make >>> the >>> logo appear in the same place as on the previous slide, and only >>> change the text. This will make for a nice transition. >>> >>> - the screenshot on Slide 6 has too small fonts >>> >>> - On Slide 7 you use centered text, but everywhere else you use left >>> aligned text. Stick with the left aligned one. >>> >>> - Slide 12 needs some alignment. I would suggest to make the blue >>> regions the same width and height and align them vertically. >>> >>> - Also, I think the font of the white text from slide 12 is not as >>> light as it is in the rest of the presenation. >>> >>> - The explanations in red on slide 13,14 are too small and not >>> useful >>> like that. Make them bigger. Potentially you can also use animations >>> to introduce them. >>> >>> - Slide 15 needs alignment >>> >>> - The green in Slide 16 does not look nice :). If you replace the >>> black background with white, it will fit better. Alternatively, you >>> have to edit the diagram again in omnigraffle and make white on >>> black. >>> In fact you anyway have to edit the diagram to make it use the same >>> font as in the presentation (which I guess is Helvetica Neue Light) >>> >>> - Slide 17 needs alignment >>> >>> - Slide 18 is not so useful. >>> >>> - Slide 19 has too many messages. What does that mean strong >>> community? >>> >>> - No need for the bullets on Slide 20 >>> >>> - I won't say anything about slide 21 :) >>> >>> >>> >>> >>> Cheers, >>> Doru >>> >>> >>> On Feb 5, 2009, at 7:43 PM, Bill Schwab wrote: >>> >>>> Alexandre, >>>> >>>> That looks pretty good. I would probably get the debugger to show >>>> itself off just a bit more - if only by picking a more interesting >>>> method for the source pane. >>>> >>>> You said that all control structures are realized by message sends. >>>> Is >>>> that really true? What about optimizations? >>>> >>>> Bill >>>> >>>> >>>> >>>> Wilhelm K. Schwab, Ph.D. >>>> University of Florida >>>> Department of Anesthesiology >>>> PO Box 100254 >>>> Gainesville, FL 32610-0254 >>>> >>>> Email: [email protected] >>>> Tel: (352) 273-6785 >>>> FAX: (352) 392-7029 >>>> >>>>>>> [email protected] 02/05/09 12:32 PM >>> >>>> >>>> Dear List, >>>> >>>> I made up few slides about Pharo. The goal is to give in less than >>>> 30 >>>> minutes the essence of Pharo. >>>> Please, shot at me, I like that :-) >>>> >>>> http://bergel.eu/Pharo.pdf >>>> >>>> I provide the .keynote upon request. >>>> >>>> Alexandre >>>> -- >>>> _,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;: >>>> Alexandre Bergel http://www.bergel.eu >>>> ^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;. >>>> >>>> >>>> >>>> >>>> >>>> >>>> _______________________________________________ >>>> Pharo-project mailing list >>>> [email protected] >>>> http://lists.gforge.inria.fr/cgi-bin/mailman/listinfo/pharo-project >>>> >>>> >>>> _______________________________________________ >>>> Pharo-project mailing list >>>> [email protected] >>>> http://lists.gforge.inria.fr/cgi-bin/mailman/listinfo/pharo-project >>> >>> -- >>> www.tudorgirba.com >>> >>> "Every thing should have the right to be different." >>> >>> >>> >>> >>> _______________________________________________ >>> Pharo-project mailing list >>> [email protected] >>> http://lists.gforge.inria.fr/cgi-bin/mailman/listinfo/pharo-project >>> >> >> -- >> _,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;: >> Alexandre Bergel http://www.bergel.eu >> ^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;. >> >> >> >> >> >> >> _______________________________________________ >> Pharo-project mailing list >> [email protected] >> http://lists.gforge.inria.fr/cgi-bin/mailman/listinfo/pharo-project > > > _______________________________________________ > Pharo-project mailing list > [email protected] > http://lists.gforge.inria.fr/cgi-bin/mailman/listinfo/pharo-project > -- _,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;: Alexandre Bergel http://www.bergel.eu ^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;._,.;:~^~:;. _______________________________________________ Pharo-project mailing list [email protected] http://lists.gforge.inria.fr/cgi-bin/mailman/listinfo/pharo-project
