[Softwires] Adam Roach's No Objection on draft-ietf-softwire-yang-14: (with COMMENT)

[Adam Roach]

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COMMENT:
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I support Alissa's discuss.

Further to Benjamin's discuss, I note that the YANG modules in this document
indicate two editors (I. Farrer and M. Bocadair) and five authors. Assuming
this distinction is intentional, RFC 7322 points to a clear resolution:

   If there is a
   request for more than five authors, the stream-approving body needs
   to consider if one or two editors should have primary responsibility
   for this document, with the other individuals listed in the
   Contributors or Acknowledgements section.

Based on the RFC 7322 text, I suspect that the best approach is moving the
five non-editors to a "Contributors" section.


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[Softwires] Adam Roach's No Objection on draft-ietf-softwire-map-mib-12: (with COMMENT)

[Adam Roach]

Adam Roach has entered the following ballot position for
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COMMENT:
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Thank you for a clearly written document. I have some very editorial corrections
to suggest.

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§4.1.2:

>  invalid packets that have been identified.  There are two kind of

"...two kinds..."

>  - The Border Relay (BR) will validates the received packet's source

"...will validate..."

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§5:

>  DESCRIPTION
>  "Indicates that the PSID is represented as hexidecimal for
>   clarity."

"...hexadecimal..."
   ^


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