Re: The Talk2 List Fw: File - NEW MEMBER'S QUESTIONARE
If you want to be picky, your answer to 5 is incorrect. They did not ask for your city. Matthew Horspool wrote: I was recently asked to join a biblical studies group. I didn't fancy it but thought I might as well appease the moderator (I was tired at the time) so I joined and promptly set their address to treat as spam. Anyway, I was sent a file called new member's questionare and, after laughing uproariously for a while about the apawling English, sat down to respond to it. Here is what I wrote: - Original Message - From: Matthew Horspool [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] Sent: Friday, August 10, 2007 4:53 PM Subject: Re: File - NEW MEMBER'S QUESTIONARE Hi, Here is my questionnaire: Hi! We are happy to have you here. Before you continue with your membership, we need you to just simply fill out this questionare form so that we the moderators as well as all other members can get to know you better. Spelling: questionare, should be questionnaire. 1. YOur name: Capitalization: YOur, should be Your. Answer: Matthew Frank Horspool. 2. Would you please give us your date of birth so that we can add it to the calendar? Also annerverceries if any? Comment: could be made a little more concise. Spelling: annerverceries, should be anniversaries. Answer: Sunday, February 9, 1992 at 12:07. 3. Email? Comment: house style is looking rather inconsistent. Perhaps a colon rather than a question mark should be used here, also add the word address for the sake of professional appearance. Though it is generally accepted that Email is a word rather than a compound word of which one is abbreviated, it is preferred to write it as E-mail, where the E stands for Electronic, so as to avoid the expansion reading Electronicmail. Answer: [EMAIL PROTECTED] 4. Are you on any instant messengers? Such as msn or windows messenger, yqhoo, skype, aimetc. If you have any of those please give your instant messanger address or screen name and with which system provider. Comment: badly punctuated, vocabulary is informal and lacks clarity towards the end. This could be made more concise. Capitalization: msn, should be MSN. windows, should be Windows. yqhoo, should be Yqhoo. skype, should be Skype. aim, should be AIM. Spelling: windows messenger, should be Windows ® messenger. yqhoo, should be Yahoo! messanger, should be messenger. Answer: Windows ® Live Messenger ID: [EMAIL PROTECTED] 5. Give your State/Province and Country: Comment: The word Please would improve the question. Answer: Birmingham, West Midlands, England. 7. Just hang in there, because you are almost done! Now is your chance to tell us a little more about yourself in 1 or 2 sentences! Feel free to tell us anything about yourself! Comment: this question should be numbered 6, not 7. The vocabulary is rather informal. Avoid excessive use of the exclamation mark, it gives writing an air of childish innocence which is undesirable in this case. Answer: I am 15 years old and totally blind. I am currently at secondary school year 11 studying English, Mathematics, Science, Information Communication Technology, Music, French, Business Studies, Religious Education, Personal/Social/Health Education and Physical Education. My two main interests are Music and Computers, although I have several others including Radio and the syntactical, grammatical and vocabulary sectors of the English language. I am a member of the Church of England. I attend church most Sundays as I sing in the choir. I am also a trainee organist. Once again, thanks for joining us. If you have any questions, please feel free to send an email to: [EMAIL PROTECTED] , and we will answer any question you have. With best regards, Darlene and Carol B and Stephanie group moderators Comment: lists delimited with and should be avoided. Matthew Did you miss a message? Well, don't. http://www.mail-archive.com/talk2%40andrelouis.com/ has it for you. Never miss a Talk2 message again. Did you miss a message? Well, don't. http://www.mail-archive.com/talk2%40andrelouis.com/ has it for you. Never miss a Talk2 message again.
The Talk2 List Fw: File - NEW MEMBER'S QUESTIONARE
I was recently asked to join a biblical studies group. I didn't fancy it but thought I might as well appease the moderator (I was tired at the time) so I joined and promptly set their address to treat as spam. Anyway, I was sent a file called new member's questionare and, after laughing uproariously for a while about the apawling English, sat down to respond to it. Here is what I wrote: - Original Message - From: Matthew Horspool [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] Sent: Friday, August 10, 2007 4:53 PM Subject: Re: File - NEW MEMBER'S QUESTIONARE Hi, Here is my questionnaire: Hi! We are happy to have you here. Before you continue with your membership, we need you to just simply fill out this questionare form so that we the moderators as well as all other members can get to know you better. Spelling: questionare, should be questionnaire. 1. YOur name: Capitalization: YOur, should be Your. Answer: Matthew Frank Horspool. 2. Would you please give us your date of birth so that we can add it to the calendar? Also annerverceries if any? Comment: could be made a little more concise. Spelling: annerverceries, should be anniversaries. Answer: Sunday, February 9, 1992 at 12:07. 3. Email? Comment: house style is looking rather inconsistent. Perhaps a colon rather than a question mark should be used here, also add the word address for the sake of professional appearance. Though it is generally accepted that Email is a word rather than a compound word of which one is abbreviated, it is preferred to write it as E-mail, where the E stands for Electronic, so as to avoid the expansion reading Electronicmail. Answer: [EMAIL PROTECTED] 4. Are you on any instant messengers? Such as msn or windows messenger, yqhoo, skype, aimetc. If you have any of those please give your instant messanger address or screen name and with which system provider. Comment: badly punctuated, vocabulary is informal and lacks clarity towards the end. This could be made more concise. Capitalization: msn, should be MSN. windows, should be Windows. yqhoo, should be Yqhoo. skype, should be Skype. aim, should be AIM. Spelling: windows messenger, should be Windows ® messenger. yqhoo, should be Yahoo! messanger, should be messenger. Answer: Windows ® Live Messenger ID: [EMAIL PROTECTED] 5. Give your State/Province and Country: Comment: The word Please would improve the question. Answer: Birmingham, West Midlands, England. 7. Just hang in there, because you are almost done! Now is your chance to tell us a little more about yourself in 1 or 2 sentences! Feel free to tell us anything about yourself! Comment: this question should be numbered 6, not 7. The vocabulary is rather informal. Avoid excessive use of the exclamation mark, it gives writing an air of childish innocence which is undesirable in this case. Answer: I am 15 years old and totally blind. I am currently at secondary school year 11 studying English, Mathematics, Science, Information Communication Technology, Music, French, Business Studies, Religious Education, Personal/Social/Health Education and Physical Education. My two main interests are Music and Computers, although I have several others including Radio and the syntactical, grammatical and vocabulary sectors of the English language. I am a member of the Church of England. I attend church most Sundays as I sing in the choir. I am also a trainee organist. Once again, thanks for joining us. If you have any questions, please feel free to send an email to: [EMAIL PROTECTED] , and we will answer any question you have. With best regards, Darlene and Carol B and Stephanie group moderators Comment: lists delimited with and should be avoided. Matthew Did you miss a message? Well, don't. http://www.mail-archive.com/talk2%40andrelouis.com/ has it for you. Never miss a Talk2 message again.
Re: The Talk2 List Fw: File - NEW MEMBER'S QUESTIONARE
Matthew, This is a minor crime, compared to what the writers of the questionnaire were guilty of, but in number seven, Avoid excessive use of the exclamation mark, it gives writing an air of childish innocence which is undesirable in this case, you have a comma splice. There should be some kind of conjunction after exclamation mark. --A Fellow Grammar Nazi - Original Message - From: Matthew Horspool [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: talk2 talk2@AndreLouis.COM Sent: Friday, August 10, 2007 12:00 PM Subject: The Talk2 List Fw: File - NEW MEMBER'S QUESTIONARE I was recently asked to join a biblical studies group. I didn't fancy it but thought I might as well appease the moderator (I was tired at the time) so I joined and promptly set their address to treat as spam. Anyway, I was sent a file called new member's questionare and, after laughing uproariously for a while about the apawling English, sat down to respond to it. Here is what I wrote: - Original Message - From: Matthew Horspool [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] Sent: Friday, August 10, 2007 4:53 PM Subject: Re: File - NEW MEMBER'S QUESTIONARE Hi, Here is my questionnaire: Hi! We are happy to have you here. Before you continue with your membership, we need you to just simply fill out this questionare form so that we the moderators as well as all other members can get to know you better. Spelling: questionare, should be questionnaire. 1. YOur name: Capitalization: YOur, should be Your. Answer: Matthew Frank Horspool. 2. Would you please give us your date of birth so that we can add it to the calendar? Also annerverceries if any? Comment: could be made a little more concise. Spelling: annerverceries, should be anniversaries. Answer: Sunday, February 9, 1992 at 12:07. 3. Email? Comment: house style is looking rather inconsistent. Perhaps a colon rather than a question mark should be used here, also add the word address for the sake of professional appearance. Though it is generally accepted that Email is a word rather than a compound word of which one is abbreviated, it is preferred to write it as E-mail, where the E stands for Electronic, so as to avoid the expansion reading Electronicmail. Answer: [EMAIL PROTECTED] 4. Are you on any instant messengers? Such as msn or windows messenger, yqhoo, skype, aimetc. If you have any of those please give your instant messanger address or screen name and with which system provider. Comment: badly punctuated, vocabulary is informal and lacks clarity towards the end. This could be made more concise. Capitalization: msn, should be MSN. windows, should be Windows. yqhoo, should be Yqhoo. skype, should be Skype. aim, should be AIM. Spelling: windows messenger, should be Windows ® messenger. yqhoo, should be Yahoo! messanger, should be messenger. Answer: Windows ® Live Messenger ID: [EMAIL PROTECTED] 5. Give your State/Province and Country: Comment: The word Please would improve the question. Answer: Birmingham, West Midlands, England. 7. Just hang in there, because you are almost done! Now is your chance to tell us a little more about yourself in 1 or 2 sentences! Feel free to tell us anything about yourself! Comment: this question should be numbered 6, not 7. The vocabulary is rather informal. Avoid excessive use of the exclamation mark, it gives writing an air of childish innocence which is undesirable in this case. Answer: I am 15 years old and totally blind. I am currently at secondary school year 11 studying English, Mathematics, Science, Information Communication Technology, Music, French, Business Studies, Religious Education, Personal/Social/Health Education and Physical Education. My two main interests are Music and Computers, although I have several others including Radio and the syntactical, grammatical and vocabulary sectors of the English language. I am a member of the Church of England. I attend church most Sundays as I sing in the choir. I am also a trainee organist. Once again, thanks for joining us. If you have any questions, please feel free to send an email to: [EMAIL PROTECTED] , and we will answer any question you have. With best regards, Darlene and Carol B and Stephanie group moderators Comment: lists delimited with and should be avoided. Matthew Did you miss a message? Well, don't. http://www.mail-archive.com/talk2%40andrelouis.com/ has it for you. Never miss a Talk2 message again. Did you miss a message? Well, don't. http://www.mail-archive.com/talk2%40andrelouis.com/ has it for you. Never miss a Talk2 message again.
Re: The Talk2 List Fw: File - NEW MEMBER'S QUESTIONARE
True but there's debate amongst local citizens whether Birmingham's still a city because, if I recall, its government includes Sutton Coldfield and some other places. I'm not quite sure how much further it goes, mind you, but I always put Birmingham down in that field if there's no City field just in case. - Original Message - From: Samuel Proulx [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: talk2 talk2@AndreLouis.COM Sent: Friday, August 10, 2007 5:07 PM Subject: Re: The Talk2 List Fw: File - NEW MEMBER'S QUESTIONARE If you want to be picky, your answer to 5 is incorrect. They did not ask for your city. Did you miss a message? Well, don't. http://www.mail-archive.com/talk2%40andrelouis.com/ has it for you. Never miss a Talk2 message again.
Re: The Talk2 List Fw: File - NEW MEMBER'S QUESTIONARE
Hmm! What you say makes sense. A question, though: if I was to put in a conjunction, would the comma become obselete? Also: would replacing that comma with a colon rectify the problem? Thanks! - Original Message - From: Tasha Chemel [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: talk2 talk2@AndreLouis.COM Sent: Friday, August 10, 2007 5:51 PM Subject: Re: The Talk2 List Fw: File - NEW MEMBER'S QUESTIONARE Matthew, This is a minor crime, compared to what the writers of the questionnaire were guilty of, but in number seven, Avoid excessive use of the exclamation mark, it gives writing an air of childish innocence which is undesirable in this case, you have a comma splice. There should be some kind of conjunction after exclamation mark. --A Fellow Grammar Nazi Did you miss a message? Well, don't. http://www.mail-archive.com/talk2%40andrelouis.com/ has it for you. Never miss a Talk2 message again.
Re: The Talk2 List Fw: File - NEW MEMBER'S QUESTIONARE
Why not just replace that comma with a semicolon? Tasha Chemel wrote: Matthew, This is a minor crime, compared to what the writers of the questionnaire were guilty of, but in number seven, Avoid excessive use of the exclamation mark, it gives writing an air of childish innocence which is undesirable in this case, you have a comma splice. There should be some kind of conjunction after exclamation mark. --A Fellow Grammar Nazi - Original Message - From: Matthew Horspool [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: talk2 talk2@AndreLouis.COM Sent: Friday, August 10, 2007 12:00 PM Subject: The Talk2 List Fw: File - NEW MEMBER'S QUESTIONARE I was recently asked to join a biblical studies group. I didn't fancy it but thought I might as well appease the moderator (I was tired at the time) so I joined and promptly set their address to treat as spam. Anyway, I was sent a file called new member's questionare and, after laughing uproariously for a while about the apawling English, sat down to respond to it. Here is what I wrote: - Original Message - From: Matthew Horspool [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] Sent: Friday, August 10, 2007 4:53 PM Subject: Re: File - NEW MEMBER'S QUESTIONARE Hi, Here is my questionnaire: Hi! We are happy to have you here. Before you continue with your membership, we need you to just simply fill out this questionare form so that we the moderators as well as all other members can get to know you better. Spelling: questionare, should be questionnaire. 1. YOur name: Capitalization: YOur, should be Your. Answer: Matthew Frank Horspool. 2. Would you please give us your date of birth so that we can add it to the calendar? Also annerverceries if any? Comment: could be made a little more concise. Spelling: annerverceries, should be anniversaries. Answer: Sunday, February 9, 1992 at 12:07. 3. Email? Comment: house style is looking rather inconsistent. Perhaps a colon rather than a question mark should be used here, also add the word address for the sake of professional appearance. Though it is generally accepted that Email is a word rather than a compound word of which one is abbreviated, it is preferred to write it as E-mail, where the E stands for Electronic, so as to avoid the expansion reading Electronicmail. Answer: [EMAIL PROTECTED] 4. Are you on any instant messengers? Such as msn or windows messenger, yqhoo, skype, aimetc. If you have any of those please give your instant messanger address or screen name and with which system provider. Comment: badly punctuated, vocabulary is informal and lacks clarity towards the end. This could be made more concise. Capitalization: msn, should be MSN. windows, should be Windows. yqhoo, should be Yqhoo. skype, should be Skype. aim, should be AIM. Spelling: windows messenger, should be Windows ® messenger. yqhoo, should be Yahoo! messanger, should be messenger. Answer: Windows ® Live Messenger ID: [EMAIL PROTECTED] 5. Give your State/Province and Country: Comment: The word Please would improve the question. Answer: Birmingham, West Midlands, England. 7. Just hang in there, because you are almost done! Now is your chance to tell us a little more about yourself in 1 or 2 sentences! Feel free to tell us anything about yourself! Comment: this question should be numbered 6, not 7. The vocabulary is rather informal. Avoid excessive use of the exclamation mark, it gives writing an air of childish innocence which is undesirable in this case. Answer: I am 15 years old and totally blind. I am currently at secondary school year 11 studying English, Mathematics, Science, Information Communication Technology, Music, French, Business Studies, Religious Education, Personal/Social/Health Education and Physical Education. My two main interests are Music and Computers, although I have several others including Radio and the syntactical, grammatical and vocabulary sectors of the English language. I am a member of the Church of England. I attend church most Sundays as I sing in the choir. I am also a trainee organist. Once again, thanks for joining us. If you have any questions, please feel free to send an email to: [EMAIL PROTECTED] , and we will answer any question you have. With best regards, Darlene and Carol B and Stephanie group moderators Comment: lists delimited with and should be avoided. Matthew Did you miss a message? Well, don't. http://www.mail-archive.com/talk2%40andrelouis.com/ has it for you. Never miss a Talk2 message again. Did you miss a message? Well, don't. http://www.mail-archive.com/talk2%40andrelouis.com/ has it for you. Never miss a Talk2 message again. Did you miss a message? Well, don't. http://www.mail-archive.com/talk2%40andrelouis.com/ has it for you. Never miss a Talk2 message again.
