hi Michael, thanks for your review and comments! Commentcomments inline
> On 09 Dec 2015, at 14:24, Scharf, Michael (Michael) > <[email protected]> wrote: > > I think the abstract could better describe the actual content of the > document, e.g., with a sentence like “… surveys, classifies and compares the > protocol mechanisms …”. Presuming we'll roll an -09 with WGLC comments, yes, agree fully and have made the change in the working copy (https://github.com/britram/taps-transports/draft-ietf-taps-transports.md). > It could also list the protocols that are in scope of the document, or it > could borrow other text from Section 1. I think I'd prefer to list the protocols. Done. > It is not clear to me what a reader could learn from the statement “… to > inform the work of the IETF TAPS Working Group”, in particular in a couple of > years from now when the WG may not exist any more. This was also, I think, originally intended to be pulled out before publication. Cut. > In Section 4.1, it may be better to refer to RFC 7414 instead of RFC 4614. Yep, oops. > Also, I think it would be appropriate to better emphasize that the section > just gives an overview of TCP and is not intended to be a comprehensive > description. Done in first para. Thanks again, cheers, Brian > > Michael > > > From: Taps [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of Aaron Falk > Sent: Tuesday, December 08, 2015 3:03 PM > To: [email protected] > Subject: [Taps] TAPS WGLC: draft-ietf-taps-transports-08 - ends Dec 31 > > This email announces a TAPS Working Group Last Call (WGLC) on: > > Services provided by IETF transport protocols and congestion control > mechanisms > draft-ietf-taps-transports-08.txt > > Due to the timing (many people take time off during the December holidays), > this WGLC will run for slightly longer than usual - it will be for just over > 3 weeks, ending at midnight US Eastern (daylight) Time on Thursday, December > 31st. Comments should be sent to the [email protected] list, although purely > editorial comments may be sent directly to the authors > ([email protected]). > > We're looking for at least a couple more reviews during WGLC - please email > the chair ([email protected]) if you're interested and willing to review > this draft (otherwise, we'll have to go "beat the bushes" for reviewers). > > Thanks, > > --aaron > _______________________________________________ > Taps mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/taps
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