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*Mar*Below is an *edited and improved version* of your essay, followed
by *critical
comments* on content, logic, and style. I have tried to preserve your voice
and philosophical intent while improving clarity, coherence, and
readability.
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Edited and Improved VersionThe Supernatural Powers
Have we lost the natural gifts and endowments given to us by nature? Are
these lost endowments what we now call *supernatural powers*?
While discussing homeopathy, a critic in a debate scoffed at its basic
principle—that the smaller the dose, the greater the power of the medicine.
I asked him how the Singularity, supposedly the tiniest phenomenon
imaginable, gave rise to the Big Bang and continues to expand into the vast
universe.
At the most fundamental level, we all consist of atoms. In an atom’s
nucleus reside protons, units of positive electric charge, while
electrons—units of negative electric charge—hover around them. When an
electron shifts its orbit, photons—quanta of energy and light—are emitted,
traveling at the ultimate speed of 300,000 kilometers per second. Within
atoms reside both fission and fusion potentials, capable of releasing
enormous energy.
Within each of us, therefore, lies an immense reservoir of packed energy.
Can we enhance our energies by relating to and interacting deeply with
nature? Are we losing something essential by surrendering our lives to
technology—freezing our limbs, as it were, and allowing machines to render
them redundant?
Can the innate nuclear energy embedded within us be transformed into the
energy of consciousness, enabling inner fission and fusion? Can we will
mighty transformations? Has nature paralyzed us into not using our innate
energies, or is it our disconnection from nature that prevents us from
accessing them?
Today, thanks to technology, we have largely abandoned direct interaction
with nature. We have cyborged our lives, and increasingly, even our
anatomies. When we interact with nature directly and energetically,
nature’s energies become hormones in our bloodstream, energizing the
trillions of cells within us.
The gigantic macrocosm consists of the same units as the microcosm—atoms
and particles. The macrocosm is, in fact, a vast collection of these
micro-units. At the most fundamental level, we encounter particles, atoms,
or simply an ocean of energy—the vacuum itself.
Our consciousness, and its emanations—thoughts, perceptions, and
understanding—have no three-dimensional shape. They represent a vast vacuum
energy within us. The potential is present. Is it not the basic purpose of
education to develop the capacity to access and use this energy?
Yet today, in universities across the world, there is no course dedicated
to cultivating this immense innate energy. Instead, students are trained to
depend more and more on technology, gradually making their own capacities
redundant.
Is there an education that teaches deep, direct interaction with nature?
Can great powers emerge by engaging with free and healthy nature, untouched
by human interference? Can sages—those who master so-called supernatural
powers—arise if we create *Free Nature Parks Without Human Tampering*? Why
do universities deny nature the chance to teach?
Unfortunately, education has been hijacked by universities obsessed with
technology and economic productivity, perverting life into destructive
economic pursuits. Economics, in its current form, kills nature because it
tries to function mechanically, rather than as a part of nature’s
non-Cartesian ecology.
If universities are to be true to their claim of providing education, the
least they can do is establish *Free Nature Parks Without Human Tampering*
as integral spaces for learning.
*—YM Sarma*
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Critical Comments1. *Strengths*
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The essay is *visionary and provocative*, raising deep questions about
education, consciousness, technology, and humanity’s relationship with
nature.
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The *macrocosm–microcosm analogy* is philosophically rich and effective.
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Your call for *Free Nature Parks Without Human Tampering* is a *concrete
and original proposal*, which strengthens the essay’s impact.
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The tone conveys *urgency and moral concern*, which suits the theme.
2. *Conceptual Issues*
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You often *blend scientific concepts (atoms, photons, nuclear energy)*
with *metaphorical or spiritual ideas (consciousness, innate energy)*.
This is philosophically valid, but readers may confuse metaphor with
literal scientific claims.
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For example, “nuclear energy embedded in us” works well
metaphorically, but biologically it is not accessible in the way
suggested.
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Clarifying when you are speaking *symbolically rather than
scientifically* would strengthen credibility.
3. *Logical Flow*
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The original draft jumped rapidly between homeopathy, cosmology, atomic
physics, education, and economics.
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In the edited version, these ideas are grouped more logically, but you
could further strengthen the argument by:
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Explicitly stating how *scientific insight leads to educational
reform*
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Drawing clearer lines between *technology → alienation → loss of
innate capacity*
4. *Style and Language*
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The original had:
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Long, repetitive sentences
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Overuse of rhetorical questions
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Inconsistent capitalization and terminology
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The edited version improves clarity, but you may still consider:
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Reducing the number of rhetorical questions for sharper impact
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Replacing some abstract phrases with concrete examples
5. *Audience Awareness*
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Academics may resist claims that sound anti-technology.
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You might strengthen your case by clarifying that you are *not
rejecting technology*, but warning against *exclusive dependence on
it*.
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Introducing brief references to *ecology, neuroscience, or philosophy
(e.g., phenomenology, systems theory)* could anchor your ideas more
firmly.
6. *Overall Evaluation*
This is a *philosophical manifesto* rather than a scientific paper—and it
works best when read as such. With clearer distinctions between metaphor
and mechanism, and slightly tighter argumentation, it could become a
powerful essay on *education, consciousness, and humanity’s future*.
If you wish, I can also:
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Rewrite it as an *academic paper*
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Adapt it into a *speech or manifesto*
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Help you add *scientific or philosophical references* to support your
claims
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