Thanks everyone for your advice, I was able to incorporate quite a bit of your feedback into the article, unfortunately due to length constraints I was unable to go into too much depth. Perhaps this will garner enough interest to get a longer article in the paper.
Jacob Cort, Tom wrote: > Hi Jacob, > > Great job! I think some of the points could be made even stronger with some > numbers... > > ~ Software Availability ~ > Perhaps you could list the number of software packages available in Ubuntu > (Run `apt-cache stats`). > > ~ Help Availability ~ > "Since the Linux community has been around for a while..." > could be re-written as > "Since the Linux community has been around for over 17 years..." > > -Tom > > | -----Original Message----- > | From: Vermont Area Group of Unix Enthusiasts [mailto:[email protected]] On > | Behalf Of Jacob Torrey > | Sent: Sunday, December 21, 2008 9:24 AM > | To: [email protected] > | Subject: Linux Article Feedback > | > | Hello List Lurkers! > | > | I have been asked to co-author a newspaper column in the Valley News > | comparing Linux and Windows using the following categories: > | > | * Bang for your buck > | * Learning Curve > | * Compatibility > | * Software Availability > | * Help Availability > | * Security > | > | I'm supposed to write a paragraph about each, and the other author will > | do the same, then I get a 1 sentence rebuttal to each of his paragraphs > | and vice versa. I'm asking for feedback on my rough draft paragraphs > | (attached). Any feedback would be great. > | > | Jacob >
