Will,

It looks nice, but for me - and I may not be representative of your market -
it has problems.    Plenty of links and easy to understand.

For me it scrolls a little.   But the thing that hits me strongly is the
tiny type AND as it is in a rather subtle colour it is difficult to read..
You do allow the viewer to alter it so that is good, but now the scrolling
is about half page.

And now a word from your sub-editor(who has had to go and do other things.
Hope this helps):

home page:
-----Who is Stewart and Company    > this hits the singular/plural trap.
>better 'Who we are'   or 'About Stewart and Company'

-----You name it, we have designed it. Our business graphic design expertise
includes    > first sentence is too colloquial and claims an awful lot, and
the start to the second is very wordy.   Why not something like 'Among our
wide range of successful designs are...'

-----The West Virginia Family Foundation is a active     > 'an active'

aboutsandc.php

------Stewart and Company is a Christian owned, professional design studio
that specializes in     > awkward and  hits that singular/plural problem
again.   Why not something like 'Our emphasis is Christian and we specialize
in...'

----We have never had an unsatisfied customer walk away with a poor design.
>  Not a good way of saying it!   How about something like: 'We work till we
achieve (or: 'Our aim is...') your complete satisfaction.'

printdesign page:
-----From little business cards to huge highway road signs, we have faced
many scenarios and many print dimensions.   >semi-colon or dash would be
better than comma.

------However, we are more than happy to recommend a few companies that have
stood out over the years as we have used them.      >  change to:  We are
more than happy to recommend companies that we have used successfully.

-----Here is a short list of what we have designed in the past:     >leave
out 'in the past' (unless you have designed some in the future ;-))

----Writing us in no way obligates you to use our services. It doesn't hurt
to ask.    > reverse sentences;  add 'to' after 'writing'
Joseph


> Hello everyone,
>
> I would appreciate it if you would take the time to check out my new
> site design:
>
> http://www.stewartandcompany.net
>
> I have put a lot of energy into making it as user-friendly as possible
> with redundant links and putting things exactly where they "should be."
> I welcome your comments.
>
> The text is 98% finished...I'm still tweaking it.  If you english gurus
> feel like correcting any part, please feel free.
>
> Fire away!
>
> Thanks so much,
>
> Will Stewart


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