On 17/01/12 15:01, Daniel Barrett wrote:
>> http://test.wikipedia.org/?banner=blackout
>
> As a writer, I believe the current message ("The Wikipedia community has 
> authorized...") is long and wordy and therefore not likely to be read by most 
> users. I recommend shortening&  simplifying it. Here's an example that 
> removes 30+ words and preserves the meaning:
>
> WE NEED YOU TO PROTECT FREE SPEECH ONLINE
> The English Wikipedia is "blacked out" for 24 hours to protest two bills 
> before the United States Congress, known as SOPA and PIPA. These bills 
> endanger free speech in the United States and abroad, setting a frightening 
> precedent of Internet censorship for the world.
>
> Today we ask you to take action.
> [[Take action]] [[Learn more]]

+1

The first sentence is really too complicated.

Markus


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