On Tue, Jan 17, 2012 at 7:31 AM, Happy Melon <happy.melon.w...@gmail.com> wrote: > On 17 January 2012 15:23, Markus Krötzsch > <mar...@semantic-mediawiki.org>wrote: > >> On 17/01/12 15:01, Daniel Barrett wrote: >> >> http://test.wikipedia.org/?banner=blackout >> > >> > As a writer, I believe the current message ("The Wikipedia community has >> authorized...") is long and wordy and therefore not likely to be read by >> most users. I recommend shortening& simplifying it. Here's an example that >> removes 30+ words and preserves the meaning: >> > >> > WE NEED YOU TO PROTECT FREE SPEECH ONLINE >> > The English Wikipedia is "blacked out" for 24 hours to protest two bills >> before the United States Congress, known as SOPA and PIPA. These bills >> endanger free speech in the United States and abroad, setting a frightening >> precedent of Internet censorship for the world. >> > >> > Today we ask you to take action. >> > [[Take action]] [[Learn more]] >> >> +1 >> >> The first sentence is really too complicated. >> >> Markus >> > > +1 for the first sentence. The question of "authorised *who*?" is one that > only serves to distract attention from the main message. I prefer the > current wording of the legislation description: I don't think people will > mind reading a few extra words there... it's not like they have anything > else to read!! :-)
I like this wording better as well. If we want to discuss the authorization, the learn more link might be a better place to detail it. > > That said, I'm sure this list is not the best place to discuss the banner > wording. Where is? > > --HM > _______________________________________________ > Wikitech-l mailing list > Wikitech-l@lists.wikimedia.org > https://lists.wikimedia.org/mailman/listinfo/wikitech-l -- Leslie Carr Wikimedia Foundation AS 14907, 43821 _______________________________________________ Wikitech-l mailing list Wikitech-l@lists.wikimedia.org https://lists.wikimedia.org/mailman/listinfo/wikitech-l
