On 7/8/13 17:02 , David Farmer wrote:
My first reaction is I mostly like the update, but I immediately see a
few nits;
I launched my first reaction a little too soon; more below.
On 7/8/13 16:34 , ARIN wrote:
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Draft Policy ARIN-2013-4
RIR Principles
Policy Statement (v2 8 July 2013):
Section 0: Principles and Goals of the Internet Registry System
0.1. Registration
Both Registration & Conservation are identified as sub-sections 0.1.
The principle of registration guarantees the uniqueness of Internet
number resources.
Provision of this public registry documenting Internet number resource
allocation, reallocation, assignment, and reassignment is necessary:
a) to ensure uniqueness and to to provide operational staff with
information on who is using each number resource,
There is an implied and between each of these, so make a) a compound
clause seems unnecessary and somewhat confusing. I'd suggest split a)
into two, shifting the rest down, proving;
a) to ensure uniqueness,
b) to provide operational staff with information on who is using each
number resource,
This provides more punch to a) and just seems cleaner.
b) to provide a contact in case of operational/security problems,
c) to provide the transparency required to ensure that Internet number
resources are efficiently utilized, and
d) to assist in IP allocation studies.
It's even worse that I initially saw, the second clause of a) duplicates b)
so it should be;
a) to ensure uniqueness,
b) to provide a contact in case of operational/security problems,
c) to provide the transparency required to ensure that Internet number
resources are efficiently utilized, and
d) to assist in IP allocation studies.
0.1. Conservation
Again, both Registration & Conservation are identified as sub-sections
0.1. I'd suggest making Conservation sub-sections 0.2, and shifting the
rest down.
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