s/should/must
-----Original Message----- From: [email protected] [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of Owen DeLong Sent: Wednesday, May 21, 2014 10:34 AM To: David Farmer Cc: [email protected] Subject: Re: [arin-ppml] Recommended Draft Policy ARIN-2014-12: Anti-hijack Policy > > In looking at the sentence in question; I think the "have" in the > sentence is extraneous, and can deleted. Then changing "this" to "a > larger allocation" and the tense changes you suggest, results in; > > If an organization requires more resource than stipulated by the > minimum allocation sizes in force at the time of their request, > their experimental documentation should clearly describe and > justify why a larger allocation is required. > s/resource/resources/ s/minimum allocation sizes/applicable minimum allocation size/ s/experimental documentation/request/ result: If an organization requires more resources than stipulated by the applicable minimum allocation in force at the time of their request, their request should clearly describe and justify why a larger allocation is required. I think this not only parses better, but is more accurate. The first change resolves a grammar error. The second change avoids ambiguity between whether all requests are subject to all minimums in this case vs. the intended meaning that the minimum applicable elsewhere in policy. The third change is because their documentation should be documentation of an experiment, not experimental documentation and what we really care about is the information provided in their ARIN request anyway. I think since this is a minor change which does not alter the meaning of the policy and does improve readability and clarity, that we should probably go ahead and incorporate it as you proposed prior to last call. Owen _______________________________________________ PPML You are receiving this message because you are subscribed to the ARIN Public Policy Mailing List ([email protected]). Unsubscribe or manage your mailing list subscription at: http://lists.arin.net/mailman/listinfo/arin-ppml Please contact [email protected] if you experience any issues. _______________________________________________ PPML You are receiving this message because you are subscribed to the ARIN Public Policy Mailing List ([email protected]). Unsubscribe or manage your mailing list subscription at: http://lists.arin.net/mailman/listinfo/arin-ppml Please contact [email protected] if you experience any issues.
