My biggest grips are lack of hyphens and commas in the correct place.

Hyphenation example:

"These are pics of the big-breasted girl in accounting."

Big and breasted must be hyphenated because they are required to
accurately describe the girl.  One of my teachers told me to use each
adjective, separately, with the associated noun such as:

"These are pics of the big girl in accounting."  Sounds bad.  Sounds
very bad.

"These are pics of the breasted girl in accounting."  Sounds better, but
what is a breasted girl?

Therefore, these two words cannot stand by themselves and still make
express the author's intent.

Now, on to commas...
Commas represent a pause in speech or a temporary change of topic.

"These pics, which I have provided to all employees, are of the
big-breasted girl in accounting, not engineering."

"These pics which I have provided to all employees, are of the
big-breasted girl in accounting not engineering."  Without the commas,
it is very easy to shift the focus, or change of topic to the wrong
words or phrases.  It causes the reader to slow down and re-read the
content.

My other suggestion is to keep paragraphs short with a double-space to
separate them.

Below is an example of what I typed earlier, but without whitespace:

My biggest grips are lack of hyphens and commas in the correct place.
Hyphenation example:  "These are pics of the big-breasted girl in
accounting."
Big and breasted must be hyphenated because they are required to
accurately describe the girl.  One of my teachers told me to use each
adjective, separately, with the associated noun such as:  "These are
pics of the big girl in accounting."  Sounds bad.  Sounds very bad.
"These are pics of the breasted girl in accounting."  Sounds better, but
what is a breasted girl?
Therefore, these two words cannot stand by themselves and still make
express the author's intent.
Now, on to commas...Commas represent a pause in speech or a temporary
change of topic.
"These pics, which I have provided to all employees, are of the
big-breasted girl in accounting, not engineering."
"These pics which I have provided to all employees, are of the
big-breasted girl in accounting not engineering."  Without the commas,
it is very easy to shift the focus, or change of topic to the wrong
words or phrases.  It causes the reader to slow down and re-read the
content.
My other suggestion is to keep paragraphs short with a double-space to
separate them.

M!ke

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