Nice track!  I really like some of the sounds you've
got in here and the way they all fit together in the
mix.  It seems pretty original to me in that respect
because I haven't heard many tracks that use a lot of
bell sounds.

A few critiques for further improvement:

1.  The bell that plays at the beginning and through
most of the song on the 3rd beat of the measure could
use some more reverb and chorus so that it really
resonates and sounds like a real bell toll.  It sounds
kind of tinny and cold otherwise.  This isn't so
important when the bell is in the background of the
melody as when it stands out in the sparse parts. 
This would really help out the intro and the drop at
1:45

2.  The main melody that first comes in around 33
seconds always sounds like it is jumping in just a bit
late which makes it hard to really groove to this
song.  I would definitely fix this because it really
takes away from the track.  Also, this melody plays a
bit too much throughout the track, so you might want
to add a little more variety be having a verse or two
with a different main melody.

3.  There is a squishy sound that plays once around
1:23.  It sounds really cool.  I wouldn't be afraid to
use it a little more liberally, as long as you don't
overdo it.

4.  The drop at 1:45 sounds a bit forced.  It comes
much too sudden.  I would try to ease into it a little
more.

All in all, a nice track though.  Keep up the good
work.  

easy.

-Cory

--- richard <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote:
> Hi all .. have been lurking on this list for a
> couple weeks now ...
> 
> http://baal.moonsquid.net/rafar/music/zoink.mp3
> 
> Disclaimer, I have only been doing this a very short
> while and am fully
> aware that I don't know shit :) So be gentle.
> Pointers etc would be cool. I
> am enjoying myself thus far though!
> 
> Would anyone have any links to sites with
> information on what is involved in
> making a track from start to finish? Just good
> general information on the
> whole deal. Thanks!
> 
> Richard
> 
> P.S Hope everyone had an excellent new years
> 
> 
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