I wonder why the writers of the CBE Style Manual are opposed to using
the passive voice. Is it the usual Strunk & White stuff? It's
interesting that they say " 'I' may embarrass the writer", but not, "
'I' may startle the reader".

There's an excellent article on "The Passive in Technical and
Scientific Writing" at
<http://www.jacweb.org/Archived_volumes/Text_articles/V2_Rodman.htm>.
You might also want to check out the Language Log piece, "How long
have we been avoiding the passive and why?"
<http://itre.cis.upenn.edu/~myl/languagelog/archives/003380.html> The
essay in which Orwell recommends avoiding passives itself has 20%
passives!

Language Log, a blog run by linguists, is generally excellent on the
topic of passives. See <http://languagelog.ldc.upenn.edu/nll/?cat=54>
(material posted since April 8, 2008) and <http://tinyurl.com/yldaltf>
(prior to that).

Jane

On Mon, Jan 18, 2010 at 2:28 PM,  <[email protected]> wrote:
> Again quoting from the third edition (but the admonishment has persisted) of
> the CBE Style Manual (page 6):
>
> "Avoid the 'passive of modesty,' a favorite device of writers who shun the
> first person singular."  The authors devote a whole paragraph to explaining
> why.  Further down in the paragraph they state:  "" 'I' may embarrass the
> writer, but it is less likely to be ambiguous."
>
> Look up the instructions to authors for the journals published by ESA or any
> other scholarly organization in our field, or simply consult publications in
> those journals to satisfy yourself on this matter.
>
> David
>
>
> On Mon, Jan 18, 2010 at 1:12 PM, Jane Shevtsov wrote:
>
>> I've always thought the main reason for avoiding "I" in scientific
>> papers was to prevent self-aggrandizement. It's not about you -- it's
>> about the research. "We" may be ok, but the passive voice serves a
>> moral/social purpose in single-authored works.
>>
>> Jane
>>
>> On Mon, Jan 18, 2010 at 11:10 AM, David L. McNeely  wrote:
>>>
>>> Bill, thank you.  Not to hammer a dead horse, but I wrote my dissertation
>>> in
>>> the seventies.  I was encouraged to use active voice and first person.
>>>  The
>>> most recent edition of the CBE Style Manual that I actually own is the
>>> third
>>> edition (copyright 1972), though I have generally had access to more
>>> recent
>>> (and massive) versions over the years since.
>>>
>>> From my third edition (page 5):  "Write in the active voice unless you
>>> have
>>> a good reason for writing in the passive.  The active is the natural
>>> voice,
>>> the one in which people commonly speak and write, and it is less likely
>>> than
>>> the passive to lead to ambiguity."
>>>
>>> There follows a series of explanations and examples detailing why first
>>> person is generally preferable to other persons, especially in describing
>>> methods where it provides clear explanation of who did what, rather than
>>> the
>>> ambiguity of the third person passive, where one might wonder who at all
>>> did
>>> the experiments described.
>>>
>>> Thanks, David
>>>
>>>
>>> On Sun, Jan 17, 2010 at 3:29 PM, William Silvert wrote:
>>>
>>>> Several subscribers have disagreed with my statement about
>>>> passive/active
>>>> voice, and I stand corrected. Perhaps the case was best stated by
>>>> someone
>>>> who wrote me off-list to say "I have noticed a change in the last 4
>>>> years...I was instructed by many to use the passive voice and to shy
>>>> away
>>>> from the active voice which very often required the use of first person
>>>> pronouns.  But in the last year, a growing trend has led away from the
>>>> use
>>>> of passives.  Just today, when haphazardly choosing 3 abstracts from the
>>>> most recent issue of Science, I found all to be written in the active
>>>> voice
>>>> and found the first person 'we' in two of them...I think 'modern
>>>> scientific
>>>> writing' may indeed be evolving again."
>>>>
>>>> I am pleased to be shown wrong and commend the scientific community for
>>>> this stylistic improvement.
>>>>
>>>> Bill Silvert
>>>
>>
>>
>>
>> --
>> -------------
>> Jane Shevtsov
>> Ecology Ph.D. candidate, University of Georgia
>> co-founder, Check out my blog, Perceiving Wholes
>>
>> "The whole person must have both the humility to nurture the
>> Earth and the pride to go to Mars." --Wyn Wachhorst, The Dream
>> of Spaceflight
>



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