RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem

[Roger Stevens]

Okay – the two short lines are released to float amidst the three quatrains… fine   And the ends of the lines rhyme, in a relaxed way – in the Shakespearean style actually –   But what about the meter and the rhythm? Answer me that!       It's a blog! http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com   Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at http://www.rabbitpress.com   Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk           -----Original Message----- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 18 November 2005 15:16 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem   Uh, it is a sonnet unless you define sonnet in strictly narrow terms, as being only a "Shakespearean" or "Petrarchan".  This is one of Bennett's sonnet forms, as seen by Smote.  But it's got the 14 lines, 3 quatrains, and a couplet consisting of the 2 short lines.  A fairly traditional sonnet in form in my book.  Bennett is getting reactionary perhaps? John At 05:23 AM 11/18/2005, you wrote: I don’t wish to be pedantic (or maybe I do)   Or maybe I’m missing something   But this doesn’t bear any relation to a sonnet…           -----Original Message----- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [ mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED]] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 17 November 2005 21:07 To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] Subject: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem   Smote sent me this, seems he's trying out my recent "sonnet" form:     Whip     With the sardines of your neighbors those very pretty plastic balls like hosers on the shore strong models of your jungle verbiage in the cellphone lake   Lick every entity   Organ hand and legless jokes some jackoff zoo with puddles of cough syrup you stirred the long mud clues and stacked gum smokes, the eggless hands and doormen   Lentils’ heavy dick   Cake dome hell on the swim curbbage’s bumbled glove your yodels snore the bomb closers petting every wall in spastic clothes: oh neighing floor of hard beans: “the whip”!         Jack A. Withers Smote   After Blaster Al Ackerman’s “The Sardines of Your Neighbors” __________________________________________ Dr. John M. Bennett     Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books & Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net ___________________________________________ __________________________________________ Dr. John M. Bennett      Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books & Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net ___________________________________________