>> Would it >> be ok to add the "finite state automaton" in brackets after the text >> where "Mealy automaton" is first introduced?
That would be fine for me. Regards Brian On 12/09/2013 21:41, Jari Arkko wrote: > Brian: Thank you for your review, and thank you Lorenzo for taking these > comments into account. I have balloted No-Objection for this document. > > jari > > On Sep 9, 2013, at 6:08 PM, Lorenzo Miniero <[email protected]> wrote: > >> Brian, >> >> thanks for the review! We'll add those elements to the terminology >> section. >> >> About the "Mealy automaton", rather than adding a reference to pages >> like Wikipedia, I'd go for an inline indication to the reader. Would it >> be ok to add the "finite state automaton" in brackets after the text >> where "Mealy automaton" is first introduced? >> >> Thanks, >> Lorenzo >> >> >> Il giorno Sun, 08 Sep 2013 13:05:55 +1200 >> Brian E Carpenter <[email protected]> ha scritto: >> >>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on >>> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at >>> http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq. >>> >>> Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before >>> posting a new version of the draft. >>> >>> Document: draft-ietf-mediactrl-call-flows-13.txt (Informational) >>> Reviewer: Brian Carpenter >>> Review Date: 2013-09-08 >>> IETF LC End Date: 2013-09-03 >>> IESG Telechat date: 2013-09-12 >>> >>> Summary: Ready >>> -------- >>> >>> Comment: >>> -------- >>> >>> This is a massive (175pp) and highly specialised document, for which >>> a generalist review is pretty much useless. I have not checked the >>> example flows, XML extracts, etc. IMHO, we have to trust the authors >>> and the WG in a case like this. >>> >>> The document is clear and where I have sampled the text in the >>> examples it is up to standard. >>> >>> This review is the same as for Last Call; my comments are just >>> editorial suggestions. >>> >>> Editorial: >>> ---------- >>> >>> There are a few abbreviations (AS, MS, CFW) that could usefully be >>> included in the Terminology section. >>> >>> Also, AS is widely used in the IETF to mean Autonomous System. Some >>> readers might be confused at first, so this should be stated very >>> clearly. >>> >>> "Mealy automaton" (section 4.1) needs a reference. Or it might be >>> sufficient just to say "finite state automaton." >>> >> _______________________________________________ >> Gen-art mailing list >> [email protected] >> https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art > > _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
