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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-tcpm-fastopen-09 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2014-07-23 IETF LC End Date: 2014-07-23 IESG Telechat date: NA Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Experimental RFC, but I have some comments. Nits/editorial comments: -Abstract says "thus saving up to one full round trip time (RTT)": by just reading the abstract one would think 1.5 RTT since initial 3WHS is avoided. Reading the rest of the draft clarifies this though. Suggestion : " TFO allows data to be carried in the SYN and SYN-ACK packets and consumed by the receiving end during 'an' initial connection handshake, 'and' saves up to one full round trip time (RTT) compared to the standard TCP, ...... " -[page 4] "MSL", to spell out at first use "maximum segment lifetime" (or please consider mentioning reference to key TCP RFCs in Terminology section). -General: Also few other acronyms used without spelling out at first use, please consider those as well. -[Page 7], 'Fast Open Cookie Option', it would be more familiar to IETF community to call "Kind" field "Type", unless there was a reason for this differentiation. -[Page 10] please remove extra space (page break) if not needed. -[Page 12], typo "connection-sharding"--->"connection-sharing" -[page 14] "as a application"--->"as an application" -[Page 17], typo "Neverthless"--->"Nevertheless" -[Page 18], typo "meet the the"---->"meet the" -[Page 21], typo "in Section Section 4.1.1"---->"in Section 4.1.1" -[Page 21] please remove extra space (page break) if not needed. Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com
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