Thanks for the review & suggested edits. Is there a new draft version forthcoming?
Jari On 29 Jul 2014, at 20:22, Yuchung Cheng <[email protected]> wrote: > > > > On Wed, Jul 23, 2014 at 9:06 AM, Meral Shirazipour > <[email protected]> wrote: > > > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > > http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq. > > > > > > > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you > > may receive. > > > > > > > > Document: draft-ietf-tcpm-fastopen-09 > > > > Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour > > > > Review Date: 2014-07-23 > > > > IETF LC End Date: 2014-07-23 > > > > IESG Telechat date: NA > > > > > > > > > > > > Summary: > > > > This draft is ready to be published as Experimental RFC, but I have some > > comments. > > > > > > > > Nits/editorial comments: > > > > -Abstract says "thus saving up to one full round trip time (RTT)": by just > > reading the abstract one would think 1.5 RTT since initial 3WHS is avoided. > > > > Reading the rest of the draft clarifies this though. Suggestion : > > > > > > > > " > > > > TFO allows data to be carried in the SYN and SYN-ACK packets > > > > and consumed by the receiving end during 'an' initial connection > > > > handshake, 'and' saves up to one full round trip time (RTT) compared > > > > to the standard TCP, ...... > > > > " > > Sounds good except it's "the" initial connection. > > > > > > > > > -[page 4] "MSL", to spell out at first use "maximum segment lifetime" (or > > please consider mentioning reference to key TCP RFCs in Terminology > > section). > ok > > > > > > > > -General: Also few other acronyms used without spelling out at first use, > > please consider those as well. > > > > > > > > -[Page 7], 'Fast Open Cookie Option', it would be more familiar to IETF > > community to call "Kind" field "Type", unless there was a reason for this > > differentiation. > > OK > > > > > -[Page 10] please remove extra space (page break) if not needed. > > > > > > > > -[Page 12], typo "connection-sharding"--->"connection-sharing" > > > > > > > > -[page 14] "as a application"--->"as an application" > > > > > > > > -[Page 17], typo "Neverthless"--->"Nevertheless" > > > > > > > > -[Page 18], typo "meet the the"---->"meet the" > > > > > > > > -[Page 21], typo "in Section Section 4.1.1"---->"in Section 4.1.1" > > > > > > > > -[Page 21] please remove extra space (page break) if not needed. > > > > > OK except it is the connection-sharding, not connection sharing. The two are > opposite. To avoid confusion, I would rephrase to "If experiments with TFO > find that it encourages applications to use more parallel connections, > cookie-in-FIN may prove to be a useful alternative"? > > I'd upload a new version soon. Thanks for the review. > > > > > Best Regards, > > > > Meral > > > > > > > > > > > > --- > > > > Meral Shirazipour > > > > Ericsson > > > > Research > > > > www.ericsson.com > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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