On Wed, Jul 23, 2014 at 9:06 AM, Meral Shirazipour
<[email protected]> wrote:
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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may
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Document: draft-ietf-tcpm-fastopen-09
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2014-07-23
IETF LC End Date: 2014-07-23
IESG Telechat date: NA
Summary:
This draft is ready to be published as Experimental RFC, but I have some
comments.
Nits/editorial comments:
-Abstract says "thus saving up to one full round trip time (RTT)": by just
reading the abstract one would think 1.5 RTT since initial 3WHS is avoided.
Reading the rest of the draft clarifies this though. Suggestion :
"
TFO allows data to be carried in the SYN and SYN-ACK packets
and consumed by the receiving end during 'an' initial connection
handshake, 'and' saves up to one full round trip time (RTT) compared
to the standard TCP, ......
"
Sounds good except it's "the" initial connection.
-[page 4] "MSL", to spell out at first use "maximum segment lifetime" (or
please consider mentioning reference to key TCP RFCs in Terminology section).
ok
-General: Also few other acronyms used without spelling out at first use,
please consider those as well.
-[Page 7], 'Fast Open Cookie Option', it would be more familiar to IETF community to call
"Kind" field "Type", unless there was a reason for this differentiation.
OK
-[Page 10] please remove extra space (page break) if not needed.
-[Page 12], typo "connection-sharding"--->"connection-sharing"
-[page 14] "as a application"--->"as an application"
-[Page 17], typo "Neverthless"--->"Nevertheless"
-[Page 18], typo "meet the the"---->"meet the"
-[Page 21], typo "in Section Section 4.1.1"---->"in Section 4.1.1"
-[Page 21] please remove extra space (page break) if not needed.
OK except it is the connection-sharding, not connection sharing. The two are opposite. To
avoid confusion, I would rephrase to "If experiments with TFO find that it
encourages applications to use more parallel connections, cookie-in-FIN may prove to be
a useful alternative"?
I'd upload a new version soon. Thanks for the review.
Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson
Research
www.ericsson.com
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