Hi Joep,

It looks excellent from the balance perspective of text versus images. I
think one of the best places for publishing is scribd
http://www.scribd.com/
and of course in the jallib pack.

However, some things I'm thinking about:
- first time when appears in text abbreviations must be fully explained,
this is a rule of good practice. JalApi for instance is the same thing with
Jal Application Interface or not?

- page 16: "on the right is shown a 16x2 character display with a 16x1pin
connector". the user may not understand what is 16x2 and why has only a 16x1
connector...Be sure a software guy which has previously written software for
PC don't.

- I believe you will upgrade the footnotes like 13 (15, 21)  when the
tutorial will grow, pointing tho that chapter explaining arrays. With this
idea, you should number the figures and refer in text as " As in fig.1"
instead "on the right" because someday you will need to refer in chapter two
to  a particular image from the first chapter.
As well " the schematics below" from page 19 is in fact " the schematic on
the right" and should be better if will be "in the fig.5"

- in footnote 14 you discourage the user for understanding deeply the
library "so better do not use them in your application" is the worse version
of " use them in your application when you fully understand how to do it"
because a clever user is not bounded with a library. Use affirmative
sentences as many times you can.

- external links form the tutorial may not work if the user's acrobat reader
is not properly configured, that's why links should be easily copied and
pasted in a browser in manual mode. From this perspective links should stay
in one row only. In fact, a rule of good practice put the links in the
reference section (at the end of a page, chapter or book) using internal
document cross linked within the referenced sentence ( [1] with a cross link
to the external link where the reference stay)

- in page 19 you refer to "TTL level (5V)" as a 5V logic level which is more
5V CMOS than TTL compatible. I didn't see where you explain clearly that VCC
is +5V and VSS is the return path of VCC, except indirectly in page12
referring to the button connection.

- I felt that writing the PWM you've lost your energy because you've did not
point that PWM is the most powerfull D2A converter feature and as well the
biggest noisy generator from a PIC.

- hopefully writing the language features, your energy comes back to you,
however you have mixed references with footnotes. 18 is a reference and not
a footnote. A foot note is used for explaining directly something which you
decide to not do it in text. A reference is another paper/html link/etc with
informations which has been used by yourself when writing or programming.

One question: instead of exhibit wouldn't be better appendix or addendum?

Sorry for bothering you again,

Vasile

On Sat, Mar 20, 2010 at 11:43 PM, Joep Suijs <[email protected]> wrote:

> Hi guys,
>
> Enclosed version0.99a of the starters guide. All of your feedback is
> considered and much is incorporated, like a full schematic diagram,
> created by Wayne.
> Please let me knwo if there are changes required before this docuent
> becomes version 1.0 and what would be a good place to publish this
> document.
>
> Joep
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