Hi :) Tbh i can't see the differences in the png or the odt.
My immediate thought is that having some things centred (such as most of the headings and the small stray, isolated paragraphs) does help a lot even though it might be inconsistent with other formatting. It makes it more visually appealing imo. Is there anywhere we could do right-justified? The languages paragraph looked fine to me before but the png does draw more attention to the "100 languages". I think the paragraph is still not quite 100% perfect though. Perhaps changing the order of things to "The LibreOfficeuser interfaceis available in many languages: even in languages for which commercial software is not localized. Support for over 100 languages and still counting." Hmm, no, that makes it clunky again doesn't it? :( So i think go with Marc's change. :) Regards from Tom :) ----- Original Message ----- > From: Marc Paré <[email protected]> > To: [email protected] > Cc: > Sent: Sunday, 12 May 2013, 12:40 > Subject: [libreoffice-marketing] Re: Brochure-type: General Information > > Le 11/05/13 08:32 PM, Jean Weber a écrit : >> >> >> Here is my latest iteration of the Letter version of the draft >> brochure. See what you think. >> > https://wiki.documentfoundation.org/File:LO4-CommunityBrochure-GeneralInfo-USLtr_JHW_rev.odt >> > https://wiki.documentfoundation.org/File:LO4-CommunityBrochure-GeneralInfo-USLtr_JHW_rev.pdf >> >> I'll do the A4 version if you like this one. >> >> --Jean >> > > Thanks. > > IMO, the only thing I would have a problem with is p.2, third panel, The > passage: > > * "The LibreOffice user interface is available in many languages, even > in languages for which localized commercial software is not available. > Support for over 100 languages and still counting." > > The separation of the last two lines ... the last line "languages and > still counting" looks like it no longer belongs to the paragraph and we > should avoid hyphenating the word "languages", By convention, we > should > be writing "one hundred" when writing in paragraph form which would > fix > the problem, but the number "100" has larger impact. I would then > suggest remove the bold sentence and just make "100 languages" in bold > > and this still seems to bring home the point that we support over "100 > languages". > > ===== > > I am not sure of the centered text on p.2 top of panel 1: > > > LibreOffice is a free, power-packed, > open source productivity office suite for > MS Windows, Mac OS X, and GNU/Linux > > As it is the only centered text left on the panels, it looks a little > out of place. Perhaps flush-right would look better? I printed out both > centered and flush-right. > > Alternatively, we could leave that passage centered, add an extra empty > line at the end of the paragraph; on the next paragraph, leave as is, > but, make the line: > > "LibreOffice is the suite for you." > > Change it to centred, "heading 2"; change it to green (same as the > above > "MS Windows, Mac OS X, and GNU/Linux"; remove the "italics" > on the line; > add an exclamation mark at the end of the sentence for added subliminal > effect. > > "LibreOffice is the suite for you!" > > This seems to balance the panel more and when printed all of the > "headings" look centered on the printouts. Have a look a the .png and > .odt files here: > > http://parentreprise.com/images/LibreOffice/LO4-CommunityBrochure_GeneralInfo-USLtr_MP_rev.png > > http://parentreprise.com/images/LibreOffice/LO4-CommunityBrochure_GeneralInfo-USLtr_MP_rev.odt > > Cheers, > > Marc > > > -- > Marc Paré > [email protected] > http://www.parEntreprise.com > parEntreprise.com Supports OpenDocument Formats (ODF) > parEntreprise.com Supports http://www.LibreOffice.org > > > -- > To unsubscribe e-mail to: [email protected] > Problems? > http://www.libreoffice.org/get-help/mailing-lists/how-to-unsubscribe/ > Posting guidelines + more: http://wiki.documentfoundation.org/Netiquette > List archive: http://listarchives.libreoffice.org/global/marketing/ > All messages sent to this list will be publicly archived and cannot be deleted > -- To unsubscribe e-mail to: [email protected] Problems? http://www.libreoffice.org/get-help/mailing-lists/how-to-unsubscribe/ Posting guidelines + more: http://wiki.documentfoundation.org/Netiquette List archive: http://listarchives.libreoffice.org/global/marketing/ All messages sent to this list will be publicly archived and cannot be deleted
