On 3/5/07, Simon <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote:
The following are my humble opinions and proposed alternatives - I don't mean to say that they should be taken, or even that they're better, I'm just sharing my ideas, and I don't want to come off as overly critical:
I posted this because I wanted comments. You gave me comments. I'm happy. :)
I think Open Graphics Project shouldn't be abbreviated anywhere in the release, for two reasons: the full name is more memorable than the acronym, and, more subjectively, I think "Open Graphics Project" sounds cooler than "OGP" does :)
Done.
Also, is 500 the number of people that subscribe to the list? When I hear 500, I imagine a huge army of volunteers busily collaborating to produce graphics hardware, and it seems out of line with reality (though it would be nice).
I see what you're saying. Last I checked, there were 552 list subscribers.
There's a typo in the second sentence of the OGD1 paragraph, "ultimately"
Done.
I think the whole paragraph about OGD1 should be moved up to be part of the main body of the release, all one paragraph, since it's what the release is about. Plus, it's the part of the release with the widest audience, since it's newsworthy both within and outside the free software community. Might as well move the pricing up to the top as well, under the main body.
Ok. I moved them up, combined, and modified the introductory line to make it less redundant. See if you can suggest more ways to polish that.
Instead of: Being reprogrammable, OGD1 is suitable for many applications besides just graphics, and the free-design hardware community will find it to be a valuable platform for the development of many free hardware designs in the future. consider: Being reprogrammable and full-featured, OGD1 is suitable for many applications outside of graphics hardware, and the free-design hardware community will find it to be a valuable platform for future development.
Done.
I rewrote the OGP part to some extent - it's attached as well as inlined, for anyone who wants to copy it and doesn't have a good way to "unwrap" the text after GMail mangles it: The Open Graphics Project (OGP) is dedicated to the development of graphics hardware that is openly documented, such that it can be supported and used in ways that leverage the value of the Free Software community. It was founded in October, 2004 by experienced graphics hardware designer Timothy Normand Miller, in response to lackluster support from existing graphics card vendors. Since the OGP was started, it has grown to over 500 members. All development details have been publicly accessible, and full specifications for a 3D graphics engine have been developed, conforming to OpenGL 1.3. In addition to the completion of these specifications and the OGD1 development platform, logic (in the form of Verilog code) has been developed for PCI, memory, video, and PROM interfaces.
Done. Here's the new one: http://www.traversaltech.com/ogd1_press/ogd1%20publicity%202.pdf And the .odt file is there as well. -- Timothy Normand Miller http://www.cse.ohio-state.edu/~millerti Favorite book: The Design of Everyday Things, Donald A. Norman, ISBN 0-465-06710-7 _______________________________________________ Open-graphics mailing list [email protected] http://lists.duskglow.com/mailman/listinfo/open-graphics List service provided by Duskglow Consulting, LLC (www.duskglow.com)
