Good point - LGTM now.

Joe

On 15 November 2014 16:02, Tilman Bayer <[email protected]> wrote:

>
>
> On Sat, Nov 15, 2014 at 5:14 AM, Joe Sutherland <[email protected]
> > wrote:
>
>>
>>
>> On 15 November 2014 03:04, Tilman Bayer <[email protected]> wrote:
>>
>>> On Fri, Nov 14, 2014 at 6:57 PM, Michael Guss <[email protected]>
>>> wrote:
>>> > Hello everyone,
>>> >
>>> > Here is the proposed social media for "Browsing Wikipedia While
>>> Sailing The
>>> > South Pacific: The Goodall Family's Experience Offline Browsing" blog
>>> post.
>>> >
>>> > Blog post:
>>> >
>>> https://blog.wikimedia.org/2014/11/14/sailing-south-pacific-with-wikipedia-on-board-goodall-family/
>>> >
>>> > t: No Wi-Fi? No problem. A family at sea tells us what it's like to use
>>> > #OfflineWikipedia:
>>> >
>>> >
>>> https://blog.wikimedia.org/2014/11/14/sailing-south-pacific-with-wikipedia-on-board-goodall-family/
>>> >
>>> Refining a bit to add some exotism ;) and to include the Kiwix Twitter
>>> handle:
>>>
>>> No Wi-Fi? No problem. A family sailing the South Pacific tells us how
>>> they use #OfflineWikipedia:
>>>
>>> https://blog.wikimedia.org/2014/11/14/sailing-south-pacific-with-wikipedia-on-board-goodall-family/
>>> @KiwixOffline
>>>
>>>
>>> > f/g: The Goodall family spends most of their time at sea. Without Wi-Fi
>>> > access, traveling to foreign lands can be daunting. But with #kiwix the
>>> > offline Wikipedia software, the family looks up everything from
>>> culture to
>>> > the fish they'd like to eat for dinner.
>>> >
>>> https://blog.wikimedia.org/2014/11/14/sailing-south-pacific-with-wikipedia-on-board-goodall-family/
>>> >
>>> Tweaked:
>>>
>>> The Goodall family spends most of their time at sea. Without Wi-Fi
>>> access, traveling to foreign lands can be daunting. But with #Kiwix,
>>> the offline Wikipedia software, the family looks up everything from
>>> culture to the fish they'd like to eat for dinner.
>>>
>>
>> This reads quite oddly (possibly because "culture" is a far shorter
>> clause than "fish they'd like to eat for dinner". How's this:
>>
>> The Goodall family spends most of their time at sea. Without Wi-Fi
>> access, traveling to foreign lands can be daunting. But with #Kiwix, the
>> offline Wikipedia software, the family looks up everything from exotic
>> cultures to the fish they'd like for dinner.
>>
>
> Good point about "culture". But I don't really see where the post talks
> about exotic cultures among its examples, so I would modify further:
>
> The Goodall family spends most of their time at sea. Without Wi-Fi access,
> traveling to foreign lands can be daunting. But with #Kiwix, the offline
> Wikipedia software, the family looks up everything from Greek mythology to
> the fish they'd like for dinner.
>
>
>
>>
>>
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